Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others young adult prefer to live with their families for longer time.Which of these situations do you think is better?
Every people enjoy their life everyday. There are different categories of people according to their age groups including young adults ,older people ,children. I agree that among these groups young adults enjoys their life to the fullest as compared to others. I feel this way for two reasons which I will examine in this essay.
First of all, young adults are more active. They spend their day in offices working all day .Obviously they need breaks. They can travel to the different parts of the world. In contrast ,older people needs breaks too .But it is really hard for them to take breaks because of the responsibility of family. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. I work as a nurse in a hospital .Even though working is my passion, I need some breaks .The previous week that I worked was the hectic week so I decided to go for a beach. I took a flight and went there and enjoyed a lot with my friends. As a result I was ready to work again.
Second, young people have good health without any chronic illness. Most of the Older people tends to have chronic diseases. In short, these age groups people have more fun .For instance, there are young adult and older people in the same house. And young adult is healthy whereas older adult have chronic cardiac and respiratory problems. Thus, young people takes decision for any outdoor activities quickly as opposed to older adult .If older people would not have chronic diseases then life would have been more enjoyable then young people.
Young people are beginning their life ,they don’t have any pressure about family. Even if they work they have enough time to enjoy the life .In conclusion, young people being active and healthy they enjoy their life to the optimum level.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, then, thus, whereas, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in short, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73202614379 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24884095911 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2596549779 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2105263158 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1052631579 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.5376344086 542% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210211030982 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768937583276 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649990125503 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140922942731 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517271615063 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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