Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It goes without saying that our families play an important role in our lives so many young adults would rather live with their family for a longer time. However, others people think that it would be a better idea for children to be independent of their parents as soon as they can. I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, by becoming independent, children would learn and prepare better to live alone in the future. No matter how old we are, we all have to move out of our parents’ house sooner or later to go to the university or to start to own families. Consequently, we must acquire all the skills needed to live on our own. There is no better way to do that than to be independent since we were young. My own experience is a good example to illustrate this. Ever since I was a kid, I had the dream of studying abroad and I remember being told that it wasn’t easy to get used to living alone in the university’s campus. As the result, when I was ten years old, I started to learn to become more self-reliant. I was taught the fundamental skills such as cooking meals or doing the laundry. Because of that, I didn’t have a hard time familiarizing myself with the life in university which many of my friends had.
Furthermore, if we really love our parents, we ought not to always bother them and not to rely on them too much, instead, we should learn to be independent of them . Unfortunately, parents are getting older day by day. Their aging results in continual tiredness and occasional sickness. Make them take care of us only cause them to be more stressful and tired. Therefore, we should let them have time to relax and enjoy their lives by being independent of them. For example, my parents, who are aging, tend to be tired now and then so I don’t want them to worry about me too much. Since I went studying abroad and lead an independent life of my parents, they have had more time together and for relaxation because my dad doesn’t have to take me to school every day do and my mom doesn’t need to tidy my room every morning like they used to do. Without me at home, they are able to go on vacations more often and they won’t ever be stressed out because of worrying about me since they know that I can live on my own.
In conclusion, I truly believe that a young adult should live independently of their parents. Independence would teach children to be well-prepared to live alone. In addition, children shouldn’t bother parents too much so that they can enjoy their lives.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.146946564885 0.229887763892 64% => OK
Verbs: 0.192748091603 0.158761421928 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0782442748092 0.0866891130778 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0763358778626 0.046263068375 165% => OK
Pronouns: 0.124045801527 0.0685040099705 181% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.112595419847 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0362595419847 0.0351676179071 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58751346352 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0553435114504 0.0309702414327 179% => OK
Particles: 0.00190839694656 0.00188951952338 101% => OK
Determiners: 0.0534351145038 0.0887237588012 60% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0248091603053 0.0209618222197 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00954198473282 0.0139019557991 69% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2639.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 478.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52092050209 5.86048508987 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.255230125523 0.338922669872 75% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.179916317992 0.251872472559 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.129707112971 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0794979079498 0.112833075102 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58751346352 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510460251046 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 59.6373529865 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9166666667 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7514196572 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.958333333 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 37.9082984658 45.7405998639 83% => OK
Elegance: 0.752427184466 1.45489161554 52% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312563707585 0.300154397459 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0994416692811 0.103427244359 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0787356390514 0.0752933317313 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.453938149844 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139101951302 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103264034359 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523625294849 0.0781384742642 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.305584258206 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0657082930816 0.067059652881 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217859717912 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432024812092 0.0618886996521 70% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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