When it comes to the issue about living independently or together with parents after grown up, people's opinion differs from person to person, and culture to culture. Some prefer to be independence as soon as possible, while others may choose to live with their parents a little longer on the contrary. On personal level, I support the prior one for reasons of learning to be independence and keeping one's own privacy. Meanwhile, it is a tradition of my family.
It is true that living with family for a longer time has its own merits. It means that one could keep living a comfortable life, a life supported by parents and lasting almost twenty years since born, which do attract some young adults, for a longer time than expected. At the mean time, young adults could save a lot of money for living in their parents' house and enjoying the food support from the family. What an appealing life, isn't it? But is it a wise one? When taking more factors into consideration, as far as I am concerned, living independently overweighs this kind of life.
Recently the ability of young people to live independently from their parents has caused public concern. Unfortunately people find that hardly can the new generation live a well life alone. It is young people’s depending on their families too much that leads to this situation. Therefore we are tempted to ask ourselves: Isn't it necessary for young adults to live their own lives all by themselves? Isn't it important for young adults to realize the necessity of independence? Isn't it compulsory for young adults to have an independent life away from their families? Obviously one cannot live with family for life long. Consequently, one needs to learn independence once grown up.
The importance of primacy comes next only to the importance of independence. That is, one cannot keep a total private life living with family. Although one may assume that the family members would respect others' privacy, the fragile privacy can be hurt and infringed on without purpose nevertheless. We may easily quote a single example to illustrate this. Just imagine you are having a phone call with your best friend and you two are talking about something secret and only shared with friends. At that time your mother passes through your room and occasionally she gets informed of the certain thing. Examples like this happen everywhere. A survey conducted by a large company in 10 major cities in China shows that over eighty three percentage of young adults feels that their privacy get violated by their families. So it is high time that we seriously take the privacy of our life into account the next time we evaluate the life together with family.
Moreover, as the proverb says," The apple doesn't fall away from the tree." I get the sense of independence from my father, who lived alone and earned his own life since he was eighteen. As a matter of fact, it is an old tradition of my family and I am really glad to keep this tradition.
In short, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that it is better for young adults to get independence as soon as possible. Only in this way can we obtain the ability to live alone and the precious privacy of our lives.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2693.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79181494662 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61857694193 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507117437722 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0219910029 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8709677419 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1290322581 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.48387096774 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424457399865 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107492676209 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102625404234 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219706692973 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103479170004 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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