Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others prefer to live their life with their families for a long period of time. Which of these situation is better? Why? Use specific example and points to explain your essay.
The young adults are the future, who draw picture of future society. Bringing up our young ones well by planting good morals and values inside them, it will help us to improve our society and flourish our country. That is why I believe that young adults can live better life with their families for a longer period of time. I will elaborate my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
Young adults are sensitive group of people. There are lot of emotional and moral changes that happen to an individual during this period. This phase of life is considered as the molding phase of a person. Family plays an important role in influencing young adults. Family care and support, indeed would be beneficial during this period. However, one who live with parents doesn't mean that one is not independent. Although, if someone lives with their parents has to follow certain rules and disciplines. But at certain point they have freedom to take their own decision related to their life. If they make any mistake in decision making then they have their parents with them to help them to find a better solution.
Young adults are not financially prepared to face responsibilities. Young adults rely on their parents to cover their expenses. In fact, this is the age that teenagers are attending school. If teenagers, for any reason, decide to abandon their parent's home, they will most likely fall behind their study and stop attending school. Another aspect that I should mention is that young adults are not mentally developed to distinguish between good or bad friends who might encourage young adults to take part in bad activities. At this age, teenagers think that everyone is his or her friend. Indeed, scientists are concurred that, teenagers' brain is not totally developed until the age of 21 years. Therefore, teenagers need their parents to guide them.
Let’s put in a nutshell, parents can become their best friend and help their young adults to pass through this adolescent phase. This is only possible if they stay with their parents for a long period of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...they stay with their parents for a long period of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91142857143 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46034508945 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554285714286 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.966903501 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.7391304348 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2173913043 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35660590209 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109751429802 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108917082654 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239009411401 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351517388517 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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