Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Parenting is most crucial part in human life. Parents impacts our thinking at greater extent during our childhood. But as we start growing, we start understanding the world. As an adult it is hard to match our every opinion with our parents. So small disputes start arising when we become adult and start seeking independence. I think that adults should seek independence from their parent as soon as possible. Even though it seems bad decision, it has many advatages.
First, as you becomes indepedent, you start doing doing things own your own. It helps your overall developement. It makes you mentally strong to face any upcoming challenge in your life. I remenber the time, when I left my home for under-gratuate degree. I startd doing my things on my own. I started taking my own decision. Being away from parent made me mentally strong, gave me confidence that I can servive on my own and can face challeges in my life. So independence from your parent make you more stronger person.
Second, when you are at home, your parent always keep watch on you. Sometimes these constant watch irritates. We can't do things the way we like. When was at home before my under-gratuate degree, my mom use to scold me for studying late night. She used to wake me up early moring. I know that she was not wrong. But that use to irritate me as I was more comfortable in studying late night. So indenpendence from your parents gives you freedom.
Moreover, as an adult, your desires increses. Materialistic world around you starts flaunting you. You expect that your parent should not interfer in your desire and liking. But somehow, because of generation gap, they can not understand everything. So disputes between you and your parents starts arising. So being independent from parent gives you more freedom. When I was in highschool, my parents didn't send for Fort Trek aroud our city. They used to be extra conscious about me even though I was capable of doing that. But when I moved out from home, I started going for treks, road trip. It only happened because now I have indepedence to take my decision.
Therefore, this pretty summerise that adult should seek indepedence from their parent. It has many advantage which I have explained above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...wing, we start understanding the world. As an adult it is hard to match our every ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: doing
...t, as you becomes indepedent, you start doing doing things own your own. It helps your over...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ee. I startd doing my things on my own. I started taking my own decision. Being a...
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Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
... independence from your parent make you more stronger person. Second, when you are at home...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...imes these constant watch irritates. We cant do things the way we like. When was at ...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...before my under-gratuate degree, my mom use to scold me for studying late night. Sh...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...I know that she was not wrong. But that use to irritate me as I was more comfortabl...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...m. When I was in highschool, my parents didnt send for Fort Trek aroud our city. They...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advantages'.
Suggestion: many advantages
...k indepedence from their parent. It has many advantage which I have explained above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81912144703 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63939037676 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532299741602 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.8264745172 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 53.2857142857 100.406767564 53% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.0571428571 20.6045352989 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.6 5.45110844103 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211776543494 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577970312882 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723660695034 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134342402237 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402064246052 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.49 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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