Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that most young adult interested in taking apart from their parents immediately after the law gets this allow to them. The modern societies highly encourage the young adult to independence from their family because of its lots of social and psychological benefits. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that the traditional style that children lived with their parents for several years after adulthood, is still the best choices because it can save young people from threats in the society. However, I, to a great extent agree with this idea that it is better young adults get independent from their parents as soon as possible.
First and foremost, it prepares young adults to accept the upper social task and prepare them for real life. People in the families are highly protected to any harms. Often parents round off all kind of damages to their children before children became even aware of these dangers. While life independently provides a realistic view about surrounding society. Adult person practise responsibility, time managing and coping with problems. As a result of these helpful experiences, young adults achieve behavioural maturity.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that young people independence from family takes a sense of power. When young adults have seen they are able to manage and maintain their own life it creates happiness and self- confidence to them. Young people can be feeling more freedom that it has an essential role in increasing mental health and prevent them from dangerous behavior like abuse drugs and violence.
Finally, yet importantly, when people separate from their parents in the younger age parents known themselves more responsible to advise them and caring them afar. Parents are more sensitive to the welfare of their children when they are so young than older adult sons. In this way, children obtain both advantages of independent life and get assistance and advice from parents at the time of problems. However, parents attention and responsibility to adults people decreases when children become older than 25 or 30.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that young people should start independence life as soon as possible. Because it is an opportunity to obtain valuable experiences, self- confidence and take advantage of the advise and help of their family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ren became even aware of these dangers. While life independently provides a realistic...
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Line 9, column 232, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... self- confidence and take advantage of the advise and help of their family.
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Line 9, column 236, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...f- confidence and take advantage of the advise and help of their family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, so, still, while, apart from, kind of, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23918575064 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66086475257 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539440203562 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8022650449 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.368421053 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402740564352 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133068674434 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809225261451 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228386892342 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090183984386 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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