Some young adults want independence from their paretns as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Without any shadow of doubt, the family’s warm environment in which everyone has been experienced, is a crucial factor, which prepare the youth, the conerstones of a society, for their brilliant future. Although many of youth want to have the support of their parents long after their springtime, I, personally believe that the sooner a young abandon his or her family, the more benefits will be received by him or her in the future. I feel this way due to a number of factors, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
It is crystal clear that in all of the people’s long-life, one day will come in which everybody needs to cope with their problems individually, without any supports from their parents. These life issues can contain a broad range of topics such as economic, social, mental, to name but a few. Therefore, if a person relies on his or her family’s support, will not have sufficient power, toleration and maturity to face these problems. Consider a person who is in the age of thirty, and is living with his or her family so far. Now, an opportunity for going abroad is provided in order to pursue higher educations. From then on, the family will not exist around to support him or her, at least in social and mental aspects of problems. Consequently, this person will encounter an ample number of difficulties in his future life without any power for manipulating them. While, if he or she experienced a similar situation before, certainly was able to get over the mentioned problems.
Second, I think it would be no exaggeration if I state that it will be a pleasure for a juvenile to feel a thorough sense of freedom as soon as possible. This sense does make an invaluable effect on everyone’s satisfaction of life. Since living with parents will deprive most people of such a feeling, as much as you commence your span of independency earlier, you will gain this feeling sooner. For example, when I was living with my family, and although we were a close-knit family, I had some serious problems when I wanted to invite my friend to a party in our home. However, these days in which I live alone, I do whatever I want, without any explanation of what I do, such as holding a party, coming late to home at midnight, smoking, etc., to anyone. As a result, thanks to leaving my family at the beginning of my youth, I started enjoying a higher level of independency much sooner.
To sum up, starting a stand-alone life, without the help of parents, will not only prepare us for facing our future life problems in an efficient manner, but also will provide us with a delightful sense of independency very soon. Let’s until it is not getting too late, rely on our own abilities, and leave our families in order to create the building blocks of a prosperous life in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, at least, for example, i feel, i think, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67128712871 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73736431908 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546534653465 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.9054637909 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.157894737 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220153620591 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610981507932 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393292599938 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127228681531 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437392656693 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.