Some young adults wants independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

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Some young adults wants independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

Young adults are in age where they wants their freedom but they don't know who to use that freedom. They don't know what is right or wrong for them. So, there is always a need of adult who can guide them to a right path. So i feel living with families for longer time is much better than living alone away from their parents.
Firstly, young adults are not completely mature to take right decision for their life. They don't know what is right and what is wrong for them. They might take wrong decisions then they might regret for the whole life. Let's take an example, If a person who is living alone away from his parents and have to decide which career to choose. If he don't ask their parents and take a decision on is own. Then are chances that he will not choose the right career. If he takes a career like acting which is a very difficult but as it's involves glamour and popularity. Then he will not only become unsuccessful but also regret for his entire life. So, there is a need of a guardian who can guide himm to take a right decision for him.
Secondly, young adults are easily infulenced by other people. They are easily attracted by the glamour they see and don't think about the outcome of their action. Lets take a example of a person who lives alone comes under influence of drug addict. That person will try to drag him in this which will lead him into a big problem. He might be even force to do a crime by that person. So, to prevent such things proper guidance is required which can only be provided their parents.
Thus, I feel living with families is more advisable. If young adults lives with is family than he can take right decision for his life due to which he will not have to regret. He will be saved from the people which not good for him. I feel young adults must wait till they are mature to move out and live alone. If they move when they are young then their studies will also be affected. So, living with families is more preferable for their future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 4.27659574468 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.97622669069 2.67179642975 74% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438829787234 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.8179153615 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.32 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.04 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304702302118 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975785034255 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819177720188 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216782072967 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745062690541 0.0645574589148 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.95 10.9000537634 64% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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