Students have more and more chances to take participate in some volunteering programs during vacations. And it is doubtless that volunteering in a city is beneficial for students to get progress.
First of all, volunteering in a city could cultivate students senses of social responsibilities. Students could join in many kinds of programs that help people with their lives, which engenders students emotion of being a member of the society. For example, last summer vacation I attended a program to go to a kindergarten to take care of children. They are difficult to attend because they are so energetic and rigorous that they are keen to play with anything unique to them in their new world. During the program, I helped them to have lunch and told stories to them that gender them to fall a sleep. When I accompanied with those children, I obtained unprecedented happiness with people younger than me in that they are pretty austere and active that provides a myriad of fun to me. At the meantime, I saw the hope of our society on them and on myself simultaneously. Young people have a strong potential to change the situation and afford developments and progress to our world and I, as a undergraduate student, also have the responsibility to study and change the world. After finishing the program, I become more responsible for our society and arduously learn knowledge.
Moreover, taking participate in volunteer programs could also make numerous friends. We can enlarge our relationship through these volunteering programs. People from different countries who have distinct majors are gathering together to meet each other. So we have a fantastic opportunity to make new friends by these programs. Last winter vacation, my roommate John joined in an volunteering program to help animals in a zoo. He met enormous students from other abroad universities so he communicated with them, completed some researches together and had dinner altogether. Through this transient program, my roommate and other students have built strong friendships and they still contact each other currently. Hence, volunteering in a city could make you meet a large amount of friends and enlarge your social circle.
In conclusion, volunteering in a city during the university breaks not only helps students practice a sense of citizenship, but also supply a good chance to enrich their lives to make more friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 995, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nts and progress to our world and I, as a undergraduate student, also have the re...
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Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...er vacation, my roommate John joined in an volunteering program to help animals in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, still, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15856777494 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00707015905 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531969309463 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0916870959 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.85 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124625352268 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388855329222 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488813955417 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103384354895 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521269793697 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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