As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1.take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors
2.volunteer to work in the city
Currently, the sizzling economy has lead to a bunch of benefits, one of which is the development of tertiary education. With the advancement of the education industry, a myriad of individuals contest that students ought to be required to make use of their long break between semesters. Some reckon that students are supposed to be mandated to participate in volunteer activities, however, personally speaking, I suggest that the involvement in a course that is not directly connected with their majors is a preferred option and my view can be substantiated as follows.
To start with, enrolling in a course which does no possess direct connection with students’ majors augment students’ opportunities of finding employment. Nowadays, living in a society full of fierce competition, there are not sufficient posts to meet fresh graduates. It is common to perceive that several students compete for the mere one position in a conglomerate. Therefore, in order to gain a competitive edge, extra efforts are the indispensable component of the rivalry of landing decent jobs. Under this circumstance, the knowledge beyond majors is likely to help us engage the employers’ interests. Apart from that, this experience also demonstrates that we are adept at quick learning and time management since extra time and energy commitment is unavoidable in enrolling in extra courses. Compared to students with extra knowledge, students without experience in other domain tend to seem lackluster or mediocre, hence, unless they are competent enough to win this position, they are likely to lose the opportunity.
What’s more, taking an extra course beyond the requirement of our majors enables us to enlarge our outlook. To be more specific, before we enter universities, we are always deemed as passive receptacles of predigested knowledge, hence we foster the behavior pattern that we lead parochial lives instead of seeking for more exhilarating experience. There is a propensity that we, based on the knowledge imparted by our professors, to work in occupations related with our majors until retirement. Nevertheless, learning knowledge not limited in one specialized domain is capable of expanding our horizons. With disparate knowledge we amass in these courses, we are stimulated to experience diversified probability in our lives, so as to maximize our potentials, instead of stifling our creativity to follow traditional paths. The research conducted by an institution in Harvard Law School to evaluate students’ accomplishments suggests that those students, who used to sign in irrelevant courses, are likely to achieve successes more easily, especially in newly emerging domains, like the telecommunication industry, the e-payment industry and so on. On the contrary, those students, who just finished their basic requirement in law department, end up becoming mediocre attorneys with negligible achievements. This research illuminates that extra curriculum render students not only the expansion of their outlooks but also the relatively high probability of achieving success.
Admittedly, the involvement of volunteer work also plays a pivotal role in students’ growth. Nevertheless, it fails to enhance students’ characters and temper. Since time is of great essence in the period of attending universities, students are supposed to devote their time and energy to learn more extra courses.
In a nutshell, from what has been mentioned above, it is an optimal option for universities to mandate their students to enroll in courses that are not directly intertwined with their majors. For one thing, these courses are conducive to the improved chances of landing jobs. For another, irrelevant knowledge accumulated in these courses enables students to enlarge their outlooks and constitutes a stepping stone in their pursuit of achieving success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, apart from, as to, for one thing, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 52.1666666667 199% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 8.0752688172 347% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3294.0 1977.66487455 167% => OK
No of words: 590.0 407.700716846 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58305084746 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24654988906 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 212.727598566 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525423728814 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1054.8 618.680645161 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4139268424 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.25 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231309110293 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651898834567 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611394663406 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143290730285 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686190683171 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 189.0 86.8835125448 218% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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