Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that people with a good ability to make relationship with others, have better position in their work place than people who have very remarkable score in their education degree. Contrary, to these popular beliefs there are still those who agrue that people cannot hid their lack in work's skill by making close relationship even with powerful people. Thus they cannot recieve to good job positions and they will not be very successful person in future. I, to a graet extent, agree with this idea that the ability to relate well to people is more important that studying hard in school.
First and foremost, most of busses in the companies have not very belrint educational background. If we have just a glance veiw to owners the big companies, we find out that most of these people not only were not very talented person during their study at the school or university. But also, a lot of them even had several difficulty in their study, or some of them did not compelet their study at the university. Like Bill Gass, he never has not gotten any Acudemic dregree. On the basis of this fact a lot company managers considering ability of good relationship as one of most important quality for employing people. unfortunately, this veiw became very power in the recent years, for example, one of my friend is searching for a job more than two years, But she has not been successful untill now. Because she is very shy and need long time for making relationship with others.
Another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that toady making relationship with powerful people have cosiderable role on career progressision. We can see a lot of valuable people around ourselfe who are really able in their field but they remaind in their first position after several years because they were isolated person.
Finally, yet importantly, the ability to relate well to people is an essential requirement for team working. Today, works do not do by individuals, because all of porjects required that a lot of number of people collaborate together to finished work. Therefore, the memmbers lack in ability of relationship with other person can damage to whole of this community. Consequentely, people with just a middel avrage of educational scores but with good abbility in relationship preferrd to weak skill relationship people but exellent educational background.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, Iam convinced that the ability to relate well to people are more important that study hard in school. Because there is a lot of good example for this fact, and because this people find more opportunity for career progressesion and because this ability is important for team working.
- TPO 40 73
- TOP-51 3
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- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...relationship even with powerful people. Thus they cannot recieve to good job positio...
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Line 1, column 475, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...they will not be very successful person in future. I, to a graet extent, agree with this ...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the busses') or simply say ''most busses''.
Suggestion: most of the busses; most busses
... hard in school. First and foremost, most of busses in the companies have not very belrint ...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun difficulty seems to be countable; consider using: 'several difficulties'.
Suggestion: several difficulties
...rsity. But also, a lot of them even had several difficulty in their study, or some of them did not...
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Line 3, column 622, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Unfortunately
...important quality for employing people. unfortunately, this veiw became very power in the rec...
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Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...good example for this fact, and because this people find more opportunity for career...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99782135076 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71859984563 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4793302475 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.736842105 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336179810243 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112783612397 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132023621954 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203520904371 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115750847281 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.