"With high risks, come with greater rewards" is a proverb that most people are familiar with. Successful figures around the world have one thing in common, which is the personality of being willing to take risks and explore new objects. From my perspective, I firmly agree with the idea and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
Admittedly, we should manage and control the risk level we can take, To build risk appetite, we must appropriately evaluate our potential and ability, or we waste time and energy pursuing impractical goals. Nevertheless, we should encourage people to step out of their comfort zone, as long as endanger their property and live.
Furthermore, exploration and adventure in an unknown field enable us to discover the opportunities for life and career. To illustrate, influencers on the internet are a great example. When social media had just been introduced, no one would have thought broadcasting and playing video games can become a career that make a great fortune, not to mention the fame and social impact on the majority of the younger generation. The pioneer who occupied a great position and expand the advantage has a unique thought and it brings a phenomenal reward to them.
In addition, in order to become well-rounded individuals, we must acquire multiple skills and knowledge, therefore, it requires us to constantly try new things and upgrade ourselves. By doing this, people become versatile and adaptive to the new change. This characteristic is extremely conducive in this increasingly changeable society. For instance, a friend of mine immigrated to the united states after graduating from college, she started her career as a computer engineering designer. However, back in college, she studied linguistics as her major instate of anything related to computers or science. After asking, she started self-learning on the internet after immigrating. Without learning new knowledge and accepting the risk of changing fields, she would have not been successful as now.
In conclusion, people with extreme achievements usually are aggressive in trying unfamiliar things and willing to accept the consequences.
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- TPO 45 Integrated Writing Task 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39244186047 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05465442719 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.859194759 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.117647059 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2352941176 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158602310042 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454623806441 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614579804112 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777097537424 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451905769972 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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