In the modern era, government play a prominent role in developing society. As some people may hold the view that government should spend money to improve Internet access; However, some others take a different viewpoint that government have to distribute money to public transportation. As far as I am concerned, I personally agree with second belief. Among myriad reasons which can support my idea, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones, which can persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First and foremost, traffic is the main problem in the several cities, particularly megacities like Tokyo, New York, and London. Improving public transportation is one of the plausible ways to reduce traffic. Although, Internet access is important and sometimes it can prevent people to go outside and decrease the amount of traffic ,but it could not be long term solution for traffic's problems. In addition, public transportation could affects traffic much more better than Internet. Public transportation not only helps people to commute but also it gives the city discipline and prevents chaotic situations. For example, last year I had a class in downtown. Downtown of my city, Tehran, is always crowded and I could not bring my car. Beside of that, Internet access could not help me in this situation. Thus, I have used public transportation, especially subway to arrive to my class on time. Without public transportation I surely missed the class.
The second reason, one should take into account this significant that public transportation causes healthier life. Myriad pollution such as air pollution and sound pollution which make by traffic and mental illnesses which augment in people by stress, are the consequent of traffic in megacities. Public transportation decrease these diseases between people ,which Internet access cannot have enough ability to encounter these problems. When people are transported by public bus, they have less stress to reach the destination on time or stuck into traffic.Not only helps to reduce the pollution but also decreases the pressure on the people. For instance, I often use buses to commute university. Last week, I had an important exam. Like always I used public buses to reach university. Just before the exam I had had adequately time to recall details of my exam.
To wrap it up all the aforementioned reasons and examples leads us to the conclusion that based on today's lifestyle. Better way to reduce traffic than Internet and relieve the causes of diseases are couple of my main reason to opt for public transportation. Actually they are some other reasons and examples advocate the claim which is not mentioned above. By and large I highly recommend that the government have to spend money to improve public transportation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tside and decrease the amount of traffic ,but it could not be long term solution f...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...n addition, public transportation could affects traffic much more better than Internet....
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Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ansportation could affects traffic much more better than Internet. Public transportation no...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n decrease these diseases between people ,which Internet access cannot have enough...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Not
...stination on time or stuck into traffic.Not only helps to reduce the pollution but ...
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Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...eads us to the conclusion that based on todays lifestyle. Better way to reduce traffic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20444444444 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91729622835 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522222222222 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6058900173 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0769230769 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3076923077 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80769230769 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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