Technology/internet has made children less creative than they were in the past. It has more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
In modern days, due to the rapid evolution of technology and diversification of applications, interconnection among different people from two sides of the world has been a convenient thing that is taken for granted. Children nowadays spend more time using electronic devices than before. Some people have a negative attitude toward technology because getting in touch with the Internet too early stifles innovation of young blood and has more drawbacks than advantages. Yet, in my opinion, it depends.
Internet algorithm showcases talented and creative people all around the world through a 5-inch screen, smart kids around us seem not that rare anymore. But in essence, they don't differ from the past, or even have more opportunity to realize their thoughts and demonstrate them to others through various platforms. For example, kids who love music can easily listen to their favorite bands on Spotify or Apple Music, and they can discover different genres like Electronic, Classical, Metal, Indie, R&B, or even Podcasts and Audiobooks. They don't have to search shop by shop just for one record. After being inspired by those artists, when it comes to creation, there are tons of instrument tutorials that vary from piano, cello to electrical guitar, percussion, and so forth, from entry-level to advanced level. Even automated tutors online are available. Not only provide knowledge but also live feedback on students' performances. Kids have more methods than ever before to render their imaginary worlds and capture their followers.
Technology is a double-edged sword. In addition to benefit from the Internet, kids may also lose themselves in the exposure to diverse information. For profit, tech companies set subtle tricks to lull susceptible kids and adults into addiction, many people wallow in unconscious scrolling without noticing it. Many kids are even influenced by consumerism and addicted to mindless comparison like squandering in games to get fancy items for showing off or pursuing luxury clothes and bags to pretend rich. Most of these kids don't have a healthy relationships with their family and friends, so they tend to seek love and attention from external objects, when they get disenchanted and realize the truth, they will get more pressure and anxiety than others, which even leads to irreversible outcomes. Thus the ability on coping with the relationship between technology and themselves mostly depends on education from parents. Kids grow up with correct guidance and prompt rectification learns about critical thinking and consciously sift out valuable knowledge without sinking into filter bubbles.
A voice rises that people are more attentive and creative in the past than nowadays because of less distraction from entertainment. However, technology is changing consistently and inevitably. The bottom line is, we need to update our mindset to embrace and harness it and treat it as a tool, not a monster or a savior. People should urge their government to set regulations by legislation rather than just blame everything on it.
Therefore, Children never lose their creativity, and the Internet has enormous potential on both positive and negative sides depending on how we wield it. While there are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people's eyes, I believe my opponents will compromise after reading my article.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2839.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37689393939 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81801316598 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 319.0 212.727598566 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604166666667 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 880.2 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7292700407 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.56 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.12 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227090967339 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057929713508 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644895687633 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135256021083 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579836342625 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 86.8835125448 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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