Technology made children less creative than past
Even though it might seem that technology has provided children with conveniency, and they tend to be less creative, I have a notion that challenges this concept in different ways. The detailed explanations of my opinion regarding the mentioned issue are as follows.
First of all, technology has changed the way that children see the world. It is truth that nowadays, childeren don't have the same old opportunities to do innovative activities, but on the other hand, technology has opened a variety of areas which they can explore and develop their own creativities. For example, recent advances in computers and graphics exposed the children to an environment where they can significantly improve their visual mindset and memory. Numerous digital devices are readily available to children where they can interact with graphically attractive softwares and games.
Furthermore, technology has enhanced the educational services for children. There are large amounts of high-tech devices in the schools such as laptops, video projectors, and automatic temperature control systems. These equipments would create such an comfortable situation for kids that they would study more conveniently than others in the past, and they could conceive creative ideas in various disciplines. As a piece of evidence, in my country, there is the possibility for some children to use the internet and interact with their personal tutor or teacher when they have some challenges doing their homework. In a society that most parents are busy with their own vocations and can't help their kids, it seems beneficial or even necessary that children be able to find the solutions to their problems through interaction with an expert teacher.
With all being said, technology is an asset which similar to many other tools, has advantages and disadvantages. However, if we examine the benefits which an asset has provided, we might ignore its inevidable drawbacks. In this case, since the advent of technological equipments, human being is significantly progressing in various scientific areas. These progresses are opposing the beleif that technology is causing the children to lack creativeness because we observe the opposite outcomes when they grow and become innovative scholars.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...d. It is truth that nowadays, childeren dont have the same old opportunities to do i...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ems. These equipments would create such an comfortable situation for kids that the...
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Line 5, column 686, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s are busy with their own vocations and cant help their kids, it seems beneficial or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, for example, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48571428571 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94436022641 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594285714286 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9133466033 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214713113484 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708852755939 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585938383449 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123273298399 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00908126297239 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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