Nowadays, we have entered a brand-new era and thanks to the development of the media, there are always different opinions towards the same issue. Recently, an increasin gnumber of people are concerned about the debate on whether the telephone has greater effect on modern people’s lives comparing to televisions. Some argue that television are more effective since they enables people relax and watch different kinds of programs. From my personl perspective, I shall lay my preference of standpoint on that telephone has played a more important role in our lifes than televisions does because of the following reasons.
Firstly, telephone makes life more convenient and colorful. There is no doubt that telephone has made it possible for people to connect with each other despite of the limitation of the long distance. To start with, telephone can inform people when some emergency issues happen, and in some occasions it may save people’s life. For example, a girl who is in danger can make a phone call to her parents for help because it is fast and effective enough, so that the girl’s parents would get informed quickly. What’s more, telephone can also make it easy for those who are in a foreign country to keep in touch with their families. For instance, I went to Japan as an exchange student last year. When I missed my families so much, I would call my parents and talk with them, which is helpful to comfort my home-sick. By talking on the telephone, we got to know how things were going on, and my parents would be less worried about me.
What’s more, the use of telephone also makes work more effective and faster. In the past, before the telephone was invented, people had to use paper to write files, such as work plans and work summaries. However, thanks to the invention of telephone, people are able to text massages with each other, which is a more time-saving and convenient way to work. The reason is that we use much less time to type than to write things by hand. For example, it may take me 1 hour or so to write a work summary by hand, while if I text it, 20 minutes would be enough. Thus, by using telephone, time used on writing files would be saved. Also, work collegues can use telephone to connect with each other effectively, such as making a decision on the work division, even if somebody is on a business trip, he may also get to know how is it going in the company by talking to his colleage through the telephone.
Admittedly, it is always safe to say that television enables people to watch different kinds of programs, which are interesting and relaxing. However, there are some game apps on the telephone, which are interesting as well. In other words, people can also relax by playing telephone games since television isn’t the only method for people to enjoy their lives.
Above all, after analyzing all the pros and cons from different aspects, we may now, can reach the conclusion confidently that, the telephones has greater effect on modern people’s lives comparing to the television bacause it is more helpful in terms of both daily life and work.
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- TOEFL TPO 30 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Telephone has greater effect on people’s lives than television has 73
- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'enable'
Suggestion: enable
...elevision are more effective since they enables people relax and watch different kinds ...
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Line 2, column 946, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...parents would be less worried about me. What's more, the use of telephone a...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: MASSAGE_MESSAGE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'messages'?
Suggestion: messages
...n of telephone, people are able to text massages with each other, which is a more time-s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, such as, in other words, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79482439926 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64328296456 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489833641405 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4633812444 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.782608696 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5217391304 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345713508843 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097602215734 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102942114899 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225785583637 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959245181813 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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