Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed
there are different views about permitting television commercials to be made targeting young children who are between two to five years of age. personally, I believe that such tv commercials have positive impact on children of this age group and I disagree with the idea that tv commercials targeting such children should be banned. I feel this way for three reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, young children are highly influenced by its surroundings at that age. when they see tv commercials which convey a message towards them, they are likely to imitate that attitude. For example, a cousin of mine who is four year old, recently came to know about the idea that drinking milk would make him happy through a tv commercial. As a result, he stopped making excuses for not drinking milk since then. However, he used to be very apathetic about milk before. such example
shows
the positive impact of tv ad on young children.
Secondly, children of the age group two to five are at the stage when their brain develops mostly. if they are in an environment where they are given attention, be it through a commercial or something else, they are likely to mature intellectually more than others. For instance, a survey was made between two types of children one of which grew in the atmosphere where they are the priority and the other type of children were deprived of direct attention. survey result
shows
that the first type of children are more intellect than the other type. The survey
shows
that tv commercials played a vital role in giving attention the children by making ads that articulate their age group. In contrast, if such commercials are banned from
showing
on tv, there would be a decline on children's cognitive growth.
Finally, tv commercials could be a source of knowledge for the young children. Rather than banning tv ads that is directing the children, initiatives to create contentful ads which carry repertoire of knowledge should be taken. tv ads can
show
stories about how to survive being bullied. it can have contents where a bullied child is
showing
surviving skills against the bullies an can portray the bullies as negative characters. Thus, ads can be beneficial in promoting anti-bullying culture. if ads were banned, a vital source to promote skill developing technic would be missed.
In conclusion, the issue of whether tv ads targeting the children should be allowed or not is complex. Perhaps there could be other reasons for not allowing tv ads that are directed towards children. Nevertheless, I support the idea of allowing tv ads which are directed towards children as they could be beneficial for the above mentioned reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01321585903 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69815786989 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480176211454 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0957188072 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8333333333 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.53405017921 243% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30712087628 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101870388565 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879213255365 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132675686264 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943453251622 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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