Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Even though there is a popular agreement that, nowadays television play as an essential role in our society many parents allowed their children to watch advertisements on the television, I have a different opinion that. I strongly believe that parents don not allowed them to watch the advertising of toys or any other stuff over young age. I feel this way for two reasons which i will explore in this essay.
First of all, young children are not mature enough for these advertisements they just look for a fun. Additionally, it might be harmful for young kids. since young children do not have the capability of thinking because its not developed in this age. Furthermore, between age of two to five they learned quickly and noticed very fastly as well as they will affect their eyes by watching a lot of television. For instance, i remember from my childhood me and my cousin watched alot of television during that time whatever we looked on the tv we quickly grab it one day we saw an advertisement of dolls that two dolls they have a barbie house so we told our grandparents we want that on that time we are unaware of thing but if I look on my past days i regret it how i was a stubborn child on that time.
Secondly, the advertisement is making kids stubborn. if the parents do not buy they will manipulate them by crying. Moreover, they will keep annoying by shouting as well as parents have to satisfy the kid's need to be calm and more attentive. This is demonstrated by my own experience, My sister inlaw daughter watched a lot of Youtube channel so every day she bothered to my father in law i want this but eventually, it is affecting on their studies and also we are getting the complaints from the school that she misbehaving with the students and also a teacher
As a result, its a very bad impact on their parents also children too. this behavior in the long term leads to stubbornness.
In conclusion, I have a firm belief that the advertisement targeted toward young toddlers are doing more harm than good so they should not be allowed to be telecasted between the kid's shows.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56613756614 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7246571039 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531746031746 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.125226094 48.9658058833 229% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 123.285714286 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9285714286 5.45110844103 200% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260462890499 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906583443347 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706695743227 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14257312451 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906487048271 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.