Television programs directed towards young children should not be allowed
Existence of television programs for children has been an appealing topic. Numerous parents over the world argue that governments should not to allowed programs towards their kids. Personally, I agree with this argument.
First and foremost, what I put in my priority is health bad influences. It is well noted that children tend to watching television than do other activities. Therefore, their eyes will contact with blue light. As a result, their eyes will be damaged and became nearsighted. Thus, television programs can damage to children's physical health. More terribly, when children spend more time on watching television, they do not have time to go out and take part in outside activities. Hence, they will became more cruel and stay away from people. So, children's mental health will be badly effected. By the large, television programs have bad effect on children.
Secondly, skill debilitation is what cannot be left out when considering the essence. It is apparent that programs for kids have a lot of colorful and funny things so they easily attract children watching television. So, children will have less time to play with other friend and talk with other people. As a result, children's communication skill can not improve completely. More seriously, when children like watching television, they will spend all day to watch television. Hence, they will face less situations in real life. For this reason, children's making decisions skill will be prevented from improving. With no doubt, children's skills are debilitated by television programs.
All in all, skill debilitation, heath bad affection are the convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended that parents should carefully consider my writting before make a right decision on allowing children to watch television.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37894736842 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80913078348 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564912280702 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8689747222 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.6818181818 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9545454545 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274878633876 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879666990059 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796822785388 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184103491223 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725215917199 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.04 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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