In their free time, many young people (ages 14-18) regularly take part in activities such as music lessons, dance classes, and competitive sports. Some young people participate in several different activities, dividing their free time among various things they like to do. Others choose to spend most of their free time focusing on only one activity that is very important to them. In your view, which approach is better?
Whether young people should take part in various activities during their free time arouse a heated debate. Some people agree, while others maintain that spending most of their free time focusing on doing only one important activity is more ideal. Personally, I believe that taking part in various activities is a more favorable approach. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, teenagers should help themselves become more knowledgeable, and requiring them to participate in different activities during their spare time help them become more knowledgeable and skillful. For instance, my niece was currently a sixteen year old high-school student, and he regularly attended a myriad of courses, including a private piano lesson, sports lessons, and a Spanish club on weekends. Consequently, he became knowledgeable in various subjects, and his classmates often admire my niece for his virtuosity. On the other hand, my father thought that language ability is exceptionally important to him. Thus, when my father was a teenager, he spent most of his leisure time studying foreign languages, such as English, French, and Spanish. Nevertheless, while it is true that he became extremely knowledgeable in numerous languages, he did not study other subjects that often, so he had problems doing even the simplest arithmetic without the help of calculators. So apparently, young people can improve their knowledge and skills by joining different events.
In addition, educators should care about 14-18 years old young people's future, and asking them to partake in various events can help them understand better about what they want to do in the future. As an example, I am currently a computer engineer, and when I was still a high school student, I did not know what job and career I was interested in. Thus, I divided my free time on weekends and took a variety of online courses that I'm interested in, including piano lessons and programming lessons. One day, I was fascinated by the beauty of algorithms and wanted to become an engineer. In retrospect, I always think that if I did not explore and try different activities during my leisure time, I would probably not discover my deep interest in computers. Contrarily, my friend, Todd, only do Olympiad-level math problems on weekends when he was an adolescebt since he thought that math is important to his future career. Yet, when Todd became a math student in National Taiwan University, he discovered that academic mathematics is drastically different from recreational mathematics, and he often felt overwhelmed by his college math textbooks. Had Todd participated in other events like the College Math Tour when he was young, he might have faced the truth earlier and prevented himself from entering the department that he had no interest in.
In conclusion, I maintain that participating in different activities is a better option due to the aforementioned reasons.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, consequently, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, of course, such as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22717622081 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98824258018 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528662420382 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4351742631 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.1 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.55 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244742991711 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831209435226 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986447721278 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183379198728 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11978954467 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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