the things we learn from friends are more important than the things we learn from family
Life is something really strange and vague. You need to know lots of things to have this ability to make better decisions. But life is not that much long to try everything and get experience. So it is better to ask others to give you their experiences. But who we can get better experiences from? Friends who are in the same age as us and know how we feel, or our family members who probably most of them are older than us but have more experiences? In my view, family members are the best people we can learn from, and here is two of my reasons for holding this idea.
First, they have more experience. If you are hesitating for something, the best thing is to ask your family. They have some experiences about almost all the things you are now struggling with and can teach you a lot. Beside this, based on their experiences, they can think more wisely and teach you better things rather than what your friends who are still young and not mature can. Last year when I was thinking about leaving my jobs, all of my friends told me not to do that because I need money; but my father told me, if you do not like your job just leave it and search for a job which you truly like. In this way, you can have your favorite job and enjoy it, why so, life is not just about money, it is more about the feeling we get from different things. Thanks to his wise advice I left my job and found my favorite job really soon. My father taught me one important lesson, which I could not learn it from my friends. It is all because he is a mature and a man who truly love me.
Second, family is more kind to you. Family members are those who you can always be sure that they really want best things for you, and no one can be more kind to you. Sometimes, friends may be envy and misled each other, but it is not the same about family. Your family members never led you to a wrong path and always try their best to help you as much as they can. In the other hand, friends may sometimes encourage you to learn somethings which are not good or at least is not important. Friends try to teach us those things which can bring joy and even stress, because they find it interesting; but, family members try to teach us everything which may help us one day. Last summer one of my friends told me I want to teach you how to smoke, it is really interesting and I am sure if you try it, you will like it. However, I refuted learning how to smoke, but I am sure it is something that just friends teach each other, which is not good at all. But, family members never teach do the same to you. Why so, they are more kind to you rather than your friends.
To cut the long story short, all I want to say is that, friends can be good advisors in some specific issues which just young people are faced to. But when it comes to making decision about serious things, family members are the best people you can teach from them. Family members are those people who see their future in your future, so they do their best to help you and teach you the best things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'want the best'.
Suggestion: want the best
...you can always be sure that they really want best things for you, and no one can be more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, at least, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 107.0 43.0788530466 248% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2448.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 589.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.15619694397 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05038136682 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.378607809847 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3374306701 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4137931034 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3103448276 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65517241379 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223831998171 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709041390297 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599337418932 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159984506465 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755899404177 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.85 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.97 8.01818996416 74% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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