Today in our society there are enormous advancement in technology, which leads to invention of a many smart devices like phone and computer, in addition to design of different games. Therefor whether video games have a negative effect on behavior of kids or not, this can be weighted in many aspects, in my perspective, I concur with the statement that video games waste time for kids. In this essay I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my thought.
First and more paramount thing, playing game is detrimental, this is mainly due to the fact that, kids will spend uncountable time sitting in front of computer and neglect their school homework or delay doing assignment or project, as a piece of evidence, my son used to play games with his phone directly after he come back from school, with the time he became addicted to play these games, I advise him to finish his homework then can do what he want, but he did not listen, hence this behavior effect their academic achievement and got a low score, this example clearly illustrate the fact that playing video games consider as a lost of time and cause badly influential on kids study.
Another point springing to my mind, electric devices have a negative effect on kids’health, recent studies in Baghdad university last year found that young kids that use these tools have aggressive behavior, this is mainly because these games have a lot of violence actions which may ruin kids attitude in addition to a bad word, looking back to my previous example, one day I saw my son standing on a table and try to jump from it, when I ask him why you want to do that, he said I am hero and I want to do as man did in the game. Moreover, sitting long time in front of computer or use phone impair kids ’vission, furthermore, instead playing outside in fresh air with other friend is more important to their health, also let them to learn a good skills of communication.
To sum up, the statement is as persuasive as it stand, based on my expositions mentioned above, that playing video game waste of time and effect kids’ school effort, furthermore, ruin their mental vision health.
Today in our society there are enormous advancement in technology, which leads to invention of a many smart devices like phone and computer, in addition to design of different games. Therefor whether video games have a negative effect on behavior of kids or not, this can be weighted in many aspects, in my perspective, I concur with the statement that video games waste time for kids. In this essay I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my thought.
First and more paramount thing, playing game is detrimental, this is mainly due to the fact that, kids will spend uncountable time sitting in front of computer and neglect their school homework or delay doing assignment or project, as a piece of evidence, my son used to play games with his phone directly after he come back from school, with the time he became addicted to play these games, I advise him to finish his homework then can do what he want, but he did not listen, hence this behavior effect their academic achievement and got a low score, this example clearly illustrate the fact that playing video games consider as a lost of time and cause badly influential on kids study.
Another point springing to my mind, electric devices have a negative effect on kids’health, recent studies in Baghdad university last year found that young kids that use these tools have aggressive behavior, this is mainly because these games have a lot of violence actions which may ruin kids attitude in addition to a bad word, looking back to my previous example, one day I saw my son standing on a table and try to jump from it, when I ask him why you want to do that, he said I am hero and I want to do as man did in the game. Moreover, sitting long time in front of computer or use phone impair kids ’vission, furthermore, instead playing outside in fresh air with other friend is more important to their health, also let them to learn a good skills of communication.
To sum up, the statement is as persuasive as it stand, based on my expositions mentioned above, that playing video game waste of time and effect kids’ school effort, furthermore, ruin their mental vision health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65263157895 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56926215736 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560526315789 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.1344086022 268% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 203.461975588 48.9658058833 416% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 252.571428571 100.406767564 252% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.2857142857 20.6045352989 263% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.5714285714 5.45110844103 249% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349405985309 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180092809644 0.076458572812 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164133677734 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233761001492 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18146360952 0.0645574589148 281% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.6 11.7677419355 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.13 58.1214874552 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 10.1575268817 228% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.58 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.0537634409 235% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 10.247311828 234% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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