TOEFL ESSAY: Leaders like John F. Kennedy and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to other people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

Usually important world leaders’ images are invariably related to their good gestures. However, there are some important leaders who are considered as such because of the negative impact on the society, an example is the current Brazilian president Jair Bolsonaro.

Brazil is facing a big economic crisis on the last decade. It creates a favorable field for the anguish to grow up. The international value of the Real, the Brazilian money, has dropped to less than half of its previous value. Stable companies started to lose their place in the market. Aiming to save money, many employers who worked in these companies were fired. This context helped on the increase of the social disparities that already had existed in Brazil. Due to those impacts on the society, citizens were willing for changes and they thought that making Bolsonaro president would overcome this situation.

In 2018, year of the last presidential election, Bolsonaro seized the opportunity to increase his popularity profiting over the bad economic and social scenario. His speeches were filled of proposals related to the “economic miracle”. By being the head of a conservative and military partisan, his ideas of improvement were linked to the privatization of the national companies, creation of barriers to the retirement, cut off social benefits and reduction of supply for public organizations, such as universities and hospitals.

Furthermore, Bolsonaro has a sexist and homophobic mentality. Here there are examples of sentences said by him: “if I see two guys kissing on the street, I would kick their faces”, “women have to win less the men”. In addition, he suggested to legalize the use of weapons arguing that it is for the self-defense. However, Brazil is a country very known for its unsafety and taking this action in a place where people are not enough educated to lead with such important liberation, it is a way to contribute with the arousal of the crime.

Although Bolsonaro is not considered an important world leader due to the good deeds, he is labeled as one because his actions may put in danger the Brazilian society. Unfortunately, leaders like Bolsonaro are being elected in countries facing important crises all over the world, which made me wonder: is the society of today prioritizing the economy over the human safety, values and rights? I prefer to not believe so.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested legalizing'.
Suggestion: suggested legalizing
...win less the men'. In addition, he suggested to legalize the use of weapons arguing that it is f...
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Message: Incorrect phrase. Use 'very well-known' or 'well-known' instead.
Suggestion: very well-known; well-known
...f-defense. However, Brazil is a country very known for its unsafety and taking this action...
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Line 9, column 423, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and rights? I prefer to not believe so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22622107969 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9517994159 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575835475578 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1796809392 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15789473684 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115797727705 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304768394365 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398943360583 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697486317352 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050201619868 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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