TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Sport and social activities area very important part of a human being growth and life, and I believe they should hold the same importance at colleges and universities as other activies. In the next few lines, I shall give reasons and arguments to explain why I feel that way.

First at all, I shall write about sport. Sport has a key adavantage, it is healthy. Practicing exercises help the body to avoid excessive weight and enhance blood flow. It stimules the immune system, allowing individuals to resist better to deseases. For this reason, doctors recommand that pregnant women do sport as it is good for them and their baby. Another example of sport benefit is that sport helps avoiding obesity, which is one of the causes of cardiovascular deseases.

In addition, among the benefits of sport can be added the development of mental stability. While doing sport people challenge themselves. They are often in contact with adversity, helping them to be more psychologically strong. A good example is martial arts, where cultivators learn also some moral principles like solidarity, and determination. Morever, sport allows one to reach an equilibrium between physical health and psychological heath.

As a matter of fact, the psychological importance of social activites on mental health is cannot be neglected ever. Social contacts build up personality and let us learn how to live in a sociaty, how to develop tolerance, fight the depression and solitude . Developping tolerance is agood way to create and maintain peace in a society, and sport helps to create contact between people.

I want to conclude, my argumentation by insisting on the importance of social and sport activities, on human physical and mental health. For these reasons, I totally agree that they shoud hold a similar inportance in school and universities as other activities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
Sport and social activities area very important part of a human bei...
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Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to avoid' or 'avoid'.
Suggestion: to avoid; avoid
...le of sport benefit is that sport helps avoiding obesity, which is one of the causes of ...
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Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cardiovascular deseases. In addition, among the benefits of sport can be added...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed the development of mental stability. While doing sport people challenge themselves...
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Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sport allows one to reach an equilibrium between physical health and psychologica...
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Line 7, column 257, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...rance, fight the depression and solitude . Developping tolerance is agood way to c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... I want to conclude, my argumentation by insisting on the importance of social an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, while, i feel, in addition, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19601328904 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95396161373 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617940199336 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1408851614 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8888888889 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7222222222 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165042173254 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048997579086 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449490436499 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091750151685 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286115179582 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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