TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

I agree with the statement that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and Universities should provide equal financial support. The classes and libraries are importand for a student to aquire and expand his knowledge. On the other hand, sports and social awareness also play a significant role in personal growth and well being of a student.

First, universities should not restrict a student's learning to classroom or whatever is there in a book. A student can learn many things from social activities and it creates awareness among students. To illustrate this, when I was young, I was living close to a locality where people used to throw garbages everywhere. Due to this, there was an unpleasant odour spread all over the place. Also, there were mosquitoes and other harmful insects. Our school organized an event and funded a good amount of money to clean that locality. Most of the students actively participated and during that event I realized how humans are destroying our beautiful nature by throwing plastic and other harmful items. I stopped throwing waste items to random places after that. I also realized how difficulty it was for poor people living in that region. After that event, the locality looked much better and mosquitoes also reduced. We realized how important it is to keep our environment clean and we stopped throwing garbages after that event.

Second, activities like sports are essential for personal growth and development of students. Its essential for physical and mental health of a student. When I was in school, we had a sports carnival once in a year where many schools used to participate. Practice sessions before this carnival gave me a good break from hectic classes and I felt relaxed after practice sessions. My concentration during study hours greatly improved. I also became more confident and competative. Many of the students also participated in state level and national level games and won many prices which was a pride moment for our college as well as for nation.

In summary, I would like to say that there is so much to learn from sports and social activities. They contribute greatly to the personal growth a, well development of any student. Hence I believe these activities should recieve equal amount of funds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...student. When I was in school, we had a sports carnival once in a year where many scho...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'a'?
...ntribute greatly to the personal growth a, well development of any student. Hence ...
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Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...wth a, well development of any student. Hence I believe these activities should recie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, second, so, well, as for, in summary, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04438642298 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68976142373 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0189642781 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9583333333 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145468213991 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459809008745 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108259182898 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126639473878 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124675677652 0.0645574589148 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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