Financial support spent on classes and social activities have been a global burning issue for many years. Governments argue that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Personally. I strongly agree with this argument.
On one hand, what I put in my priority is skills development. The fact is that sports and clubs provide a golden chance for students to participate in many different activities. There is a likelihood that they will be surrounded by many works since they also have to finish their task at school. Therefore, it is necessary for them to organize their schedule effectively in order to balance the time between studying and joining clubs and sport activities. As a result, it goes without saying that their time-management skills will be significantly improved. More importantly, students are given a good opportunity to meet new people when they take part in sports and social activities. There is a high chance that these people are different in many aspects. Accordingly, it is vital for them to learn how to work in harmony in order to reach the consensus on a subject. Therefore, it can be assured that their team-working skills will be substantially enhanced. Without doubt, sports and social activities play an important role in developing students’ skills and equal financial support should be spent on them.
On the other hand, some people might say that sports and activities are likely to distract students from their studying. Therefore, it will critically affect students’ study efficiency. However, this opinion is not always true. In fact, sport activities are often carefully scheduled by the school board to not occur at the same time as classes. Furthermore, students are likely to relax when they participate in sports activities. There is a high chance that they can play with their friends and enjoy themselves since they do not have to worry about the work in class. Accordingly, they want to make sure that students can fully focus on their classes. Given such relaxing moment, students are able to perform better in class. Accordingly, sports and activities should be considered as a good way to improve students’ working outcome Beyond any doubt, the idea that taking sports or activities will harm student’s study progress and they should not receive financial support is often possible to end in collapse.
In conclusion, skills development and study efficiency are the convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended that readers should take my writing into close consideration.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...n chance for students to participate in many different activities. There is a likelihood that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24586288416 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95042280336 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482269503546 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3009691756 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4583333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204592632459 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618998436504 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940517639125 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157126107082 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125348960051 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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