TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

There is no shortage of debate about whether sports and social activities should equal importance and financial support as classes and libraries. In my opinion, they should be as important as classes and libraries and get equal financial support. I feel this way for two reasons, which I have explored below.

Firstly, I feel that sports and social activities are very crucial for the development of social skills in students. Sports not only help students stay fit but also help them cope with academic and other external pressures. For example, In my personal experience when I was in school I used to play in kabaddi team for the school, which is where I learned how beneficial it is to work in a team and importance of staying united. It helped further in life to become a good team player and integrate into any teams with ease whereas students who hadn't worked with teams in social activities or sports often had trouble working in a team. I also used to participate in debate competitions in my school which made me confident and improve my communication skills, which had a little scope of improvement in classes.

Secondly, not every student is made the same and cannot be expected to be interested in academics. Sports and Social activities help such students who are interested in other spheres to build skills which can enable them to be successful in their careers. For example, a cousin of mine was interested in theatrics but his school did not do much in that sphere. So he had to rely on external options and often had trouble finding opportunities to showcase his talent whereas my classmates could easily pursue their interests in theatrics as my school had a dedicated theatrics club and often supported financially by organizing workshops and contests.

I therefore strongly feel that sports and social activities should get as much importance and financial assistance as academics. This can not only help in the overall growth of students but also help students with varied interests build their career in the respective spheres.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...ny teams with ease whereas students who hadnt worked with teams in social activities ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, i feel, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95664739884 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7417206232 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4315098692 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.5 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171616648389 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077907299594 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881338457017 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133590903883 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840157229035 0.0645574589148 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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