TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

I agree with that the activities should have equal economic support. I feel this way for two main reasons.

First, universities and colleges should provide different kinds of activities where the students can enjoy their free time choosing any sport or social activity.

This will encourage them to acquire the physical capacity to perform any sport if they want to be competitive and be part of the university’s team or as a hobby for anyone who wants only to enjoy some activities. In addition, these activities will help students have a clear and relaxing mind to focus on their goals. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was at the university, I used to be part of a volleyball team, and I used my free time everyday at noon swimming. Because of these opportunities, I would feel happy and relaxed when I attended my dental classes and clinical practices with a very clear mind.

A second reason, that I believe any sport or activity at the university life is important is that it is an opportunity to socialize with others in the class room or in the library. This is also a way to make a very good friends. It is very important try to keep yourself busy and focus on enjoying the campus and it creates healthy habits that are so beneficial for all the students.

In conclusion, I strongly believe all the students that practice any sport at a competitive level or as a hobby will be more successful in their studies because it creates responsible individuals. By giving financial support to sports and social activities, universities and colleges are encouraging everyone to have a nice and healthy environment.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, after all, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75432525952 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90973191781 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557093425606 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.5521258723 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170925681691 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650987812912 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695699878526 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11902803003 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368459689576 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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