Sports and social activities are the essential parts of our lives especially if we consider the side effect of modern technologies on our physical and mental health. Undoubtedly, without exercising we will encounter many serious physical problems. At the same time lack of social activity obviously takes opportunities away from you by bringing you into mental conflicts. Sports and social activities, being just as important as classes and libraries and therefore receiving financial support, some students sure believe that it is a great idea; some may oppose it. I do agree with attaching that importance to sports and social activities at universities and colleges for two important reasons.
The main reason is that you can find friends which is very helpful in keeping you away from mental health problems. Joining a sports team or attending a social group, you will be separated into smaller groups in order to have competition or interaction with each other. Group members have to keep a strong team spirit and friendship if they want to be succeeded. For example, when I was a student at the university I joined a football team as a mandatory course in which we were separated into three groups and then we had competitions.Gradually and during the games, the group members became wonderful friends and even years after the football games we are still close friends. as you can see, we wouldn't have had this friendship without joining a football team within the university's sports course.
Another reason is that sports and social activities can build up your physical health and strength. Approximately all sports and similar activities require some mobility and active muscles. Mobility and muscle activity bring in better circulation and therefore lower possibility to catch cardiovascular diseases. Most of the students who might have stayed physically inactive during their education, have to enroll these courses and follow the schedule in which they do regular exercises and consequently increase their physical health. For instance, before joining the football team I had high cholesterol level and I was advised to do exercises. Since we had to exercise three sessions per week after two months my cholesterol level was decreased. This experience taught me that sports and physical activities are very beneficial for your health.
In sum, even though with these clear manifestations there are still people that may oppose the plan, sports and social activities are essential parts of universities and colleges. Not only will the sports and social activities help you find good friends but also the physical activities keep you away from various mental and physical diseases. Every university and college should continue to financially support sports and social activities.
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- TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32054176072 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87428507778 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512415349887 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1981883761 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.85 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253994912991 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866553331757 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783623691558 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179149140087 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947282868771 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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