TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Friends are vital parts of our lives with whom we share our happiest and saddest moments together. Friends are companions we make through our lives everywhere we go to live, study or work. I disagree with the statement keeping old friends is more important that getting new ones. As we grow older, we keep changing the places we live in and environment around us where we meet new people every day.

The following statement is not true based on couple of my personal experiences. It is impossible for us to stop meeting new people, because it is the way of our lifestyle or demand from work. According to my experience, I had one best friend with whom I shared my everything including my secrets, dreams and wishes. We used to go to same kindergarten where we became this close, even our separation from kindergarten could not break our strong bond. Unfortunately, we went to different schools where we started getting distant. Even though I missed my best friend I had many difficulties in school such as learning a new language which is why I could not meet my friend. Simultaneously, I met some people at school who had same interests as mine and became best friends. Despite having an opinion that making new friends mean betraying my best friend, the environment made us to realize that making new friends is nothing but adapting to our new lifestyles.

Secondly, my best friend from class transferring to another school gave me a big trauma. Ever since I was a little girl I used to have one friend at a time, so when my friend from first to fifth grade transferred I did not have any friends left. This made me realize again that just by keeping an old friend i cant move or adapt to new circumstances. Although my friend and I got separated we tried to keep close as we could, but as time goes on it keeps getting more difficult.

Now that I went through this, I know that just keeping old friends is a bad habit and making new friends does not mean forgetting the old ones. Meeting new people everyday and making friends is a sign that we are moving forward and adapting to the environments we live in. On the other hand, keeping an old friend does not mean someone is weak on not adaptable, it means he or she is a friendly and outgoing person.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng the places we live in and environment around us where we meet new people every...
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Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...gain that just by keeping an old friend i cant move or adapt to new circumstances...
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Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...in that just by keeping an old friend i cant move or adapt to new circumstances. Alt...
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Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...etting the old ones. Meeting new people everyday and making friends is a sign that we ar...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54034229829 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63056824433 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498777506112 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1037847039 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.7368421053 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187591604625 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782025642676 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076028962448 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13445814234 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195988919733 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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