Time is a mystery which has always helped to organize the whole universe in a particular series. We organize each and every bit of our life according to the time. So, I disagree that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment. If we look back and compare the development of science and technology in the world, we would understand that man isn't wasting his time for personal enjoyment. I would say that, Man, A social animal organizes things in such a way that he makes time for himself when it is needed.
In this transient world, where people work so hard to build their family and also participate in betterment of society, they don't have extra time to spend for over enjoyment. Youngsters have been the biggest support in the development of a nation's economy and no one can deny the fact. When the youth are so actively participating and taking responsibilities to solve the country's problem, they have the power to bring revolution in the world.
Added to this, when we see the development in various fields like science, technology, engineering and mathematics, I would say that people are contributing for a better tomorrow. There are myriad examples to consider. For instance, in early days there were very less facilities to communicate a news. But now, media is one of the fastest medium of communication. Of course there are pros and cons in every invention. The advantages outweighs the disadvantages and there is improvement in every sector only because people are doing the things they should do.
Admittedly, there are justifications by the people who argue that technology has made man sedentary. But when you see the development in field of medical, science, technology and engineering, the effort and time people put in the research, the discoveries and inventions cope with it. In light to this, reinforcing the idea how man has made the world a better place for living, there is nothing wrong in taking time for personal enjoyment for sometime.
With the aforementioned facts, it is clearly seen by the development of Science and technology, Man has always been a responsible social animal actively involved in finding ways and means for a better future.
- TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo 73
- TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples 60
- Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...the world, we would understand that man isnt wasting his time for personal enjoyment...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ticipate in betterment of society, they dont have extra time to spend for over enjoy...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...biggest support in the development of a nations economy and no one can deny the fact. W...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun facilities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...instance, in early days there were very less facilities to communicate a news. But n...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...ere very less facilities to communicate a news. But now, media is one of the fastest m...
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Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'outweigh'.
Suggestion: outweigh
...cons in every invention. The advantages outweighs the disadvantages and there is improvem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95923913043 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89883249876 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529891304348 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7570161786 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.388888889 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175150083365 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549114974304 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846386844964 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866744562715 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589594645352 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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