People must perform both spend time on personal enjoyment such as go to cinema with friens, and doing things they should do for individual improvement. However, people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. I agree with this opinion owing to several resons that I will explain the following sentences.
To begin with, people are getting lazy due to devoloping tecnology. Age of tecnology provide people easier way to figure out with problems. Thats why, people are not eager to spend time with their obligation jobs. When someone wants to watch one of the famous movie, he/she could do this with simple way such tv or computers. People spend incredible time for computer games which makes people to loose sight of doinh things they shold do. Sometimes, they do not realise that they are hungry.
Secondly, there are too many opportinuties outside for enjoying such as cafes, restaurants, game centers, cinemas or big shops. Such things make people go outside and spend time for personal necessaties. Especially, big shop centers have every thing inside where people go, they could find everything easliy and they can spend hours and hours. For example, the student after scholl, they go these shopping center and they do not realise even time. Although, they should study to attemp high scholl or university, they prefer to enjoy their time.
Last but least, mobile phone has inconceivable features inside that you could download countless apps like games. Social media gets people to loose also comminucate each other. When they are together to meet, they are always with phone and share every thing moment buy moment.
To sum up, I concur with the opinion of those who believe that people spend too much for individual enjoyment than what they should do daily life because of the reasons explained above. However, I believe that people never give up to spend their time for wasty thing and in the future they will loose their creater feature.
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...wasty thing and in the future they will loose their creater feature.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00295857988 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33560722239 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565088757396 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6769729066 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508774850112 0.236089414692 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170865597863 0.076458572812 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16795309902 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316970979559 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183544690701 0.0645574589148 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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