I agree with this opinion about the people. Although there are so many restriction and forbidden activities around the world people think that these activities prevent them from truthfull feeling about the life. Moreove, Those people think they feel better if they do what they want. In fact, they believe the approved enjoyment habits in the world restricts their desire in happiness. Also they believe that there are very funny experiences that the government and the other people are not aware of it.
Firstly, the people think that they feel better if they d what they want. Despite the fact that there are alot of rules that restricts enjoyfull activities, they think those activities will not satisfy their actual desire in the society. For example, they think the life is short and they are not able to do what they want if they do what they should do. As amater of fact, These restrictions will cause them to reduce their desire as well as their ability in the society.
Secondly, The believe on freedom in making decision need to avoid restricting themselves by outside forces. For instance, these restrictions not only prevents them to do what they want but also limits their actions to trivial and customary bahaviours. In fact, boring and reckless, they are avoided to do their desires by trivial things.
At last, they believe they can do what the other are not able to do. On one hand they want to be unique by doing special activites. On the other hand, they are able to take new experience if they do new activities in their life. Despite some activities are so dangerous, that may produce unpredictable effects in their life, they are able to increase their skills through these activities.
In conclusion, most of us people around the world consider our desire in doing special activivties rather than what the society tell us to do. These activities can help us to increase our happiness as though we are the happies person in the earth. Also there are alot of rules around the worls that we think those are made to restrict our happiness. In fact we love to be unique and increase our experiences with doing something new.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 387, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ld restricts their desire in happiness. Also they believe that there are very funny ...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ir ability in the society. Secondly, The believe on freedom in making decision need to a...
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Line 5, column 15, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...bility in the society. Secondly, The believe on freedom in making decision need to a...
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Line 9, column 249, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...we are the happies person in the earth. Also there are alot of rules around the worl...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'as well as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.192118226601 0.229887763892 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.174876847291 0.158761421928 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.076354679803 0.0866891130778 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0467980295567 0.046263068375 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.115763546798 0.0685040099705 169% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.133004926108 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0197044334975 0.0351676179071 56% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42882420432 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0344827586207 0.0309702414327 111% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0738916256158 0.0887237588012 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0147783251232 0.0209618222197 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0221674876847 0.0139019557991 159% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2153.0 2387.08602151 90% => OK
No of words: 371.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80323450135 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.291105121294 0.338922669872 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.212938005391 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137466307278 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.099730458221 0.112833075102 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42882420432 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433962264151 0.524397521467 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.8211023881 59.2087087015 76% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.55 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3459968555 48.84282405 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.65 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 39.8438005391 45.7405998639 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.02189781022 1.45489161554 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287547691402 0.300154397459 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138635597886 0.103427244359 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.080345062763 0.0752933317313 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.561975964572 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113025961802 0.151897553556 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127938252476 0.114077575197 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738041194085 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392033237617 0.336927656856 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.119821047418 0.067059652881 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202961358262 0.210909579961 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279529900269 0.0618886996521 45% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.