TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s fast-changing life peoples are trying to escape their mundane lives for some personal enjoyment by spending their money for traveling or going to amusement parks or buying some new gadgets, which give them personal enjoyment and they can escape from their daily lives. Spending money on personal enjoyment, I think nothing wrong with that. In fact, it's their money they can spend on anything whatever they want to spend as long as that does not hurt anyone.
Spending money on unnecessary things, it is a personal choice and some unnecessary things might be necessary for someone. For example, peoples who live in hilly areas, they don't need air cooler, which is unnecessary for them but those peoples who live in hot and humid areas peoples sometimes save their money to buy an air cooler, so air cooler is necessities for them.
Another thing that peoples spend their money is buying technologies like new gadgets or new phone or laptop. But it is their personal choice again, for examples some peoples buy iPhone x whereas some peoples don’t spend their money on phones. They might save their money for traveling. For example, I don't like to spend that much money on phones or gadgets but I am saving my money for traveling, it's traveling which gives me personal amusement whereas some peoples get personal pleasure by spending a big chunk of their money on gadgets. Some peoples spending their money for their families by going to some Disney world with their child, it's the personal time they are buying and spending time with family is not unnecessary.
Peoples spend their money on cars or bikes and that totally depends on their social status and their personal choice. For example, peoples who travel a lot and want to travel in a more personal and comfortable way, they buy cars for their personal comfort.
At the end some peoples can argue that, in spite of spending money on some useless gadgets or on travelling peoples should spent their money on some social works or help the poor or spending their money on health insurance, but again they are not bound by any law to do so, they are paying taxes and it's governments duty to look after social incidents. If peoples spending their personal money on their personal amusement, until that does not hurt someone is entirely fine and no one has rights to tell someone what is necessary and what is not good for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...think nothing wrong with that. In fact, its their money they can spend on anything ...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., peoples who live in hilly areas, they dont need air cooler, which is unnecessary f...
^^^^
Line 4, column 306, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...eir money for traveling. For example, I dont like to spend that much money on phones...
^^^^
Line 4, column 645, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... to some Disney world with their child, its the personal time they are buying and s...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, whereas, another thing, for example, i think, in fact, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80481927711 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35686795028 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433734939759 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.8708803214 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.428571429 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6428571429 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164725188221 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817525322069 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0262674170287 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10948293974 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283787307772 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.