TPO-06 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People always think they are living harder than others. In my opinion, as a modern person, I think the people from past lived easier. These are the following reasons: we have longer history, more complex technology that we need to learn, more dangerous society than them. In addition, modern society has too much competitive mind.

The ancestor made lots of history when they are living;furthermore, we are making the history, also. As much as the time flows, people get more complex history than before. My grandparents are aware with the history because they have lived at that time. Understanding the history with only memorizing is tough and unrealistic. However, the people in present have no way except that way. In other words, they need to only memorize without choice.

Secondly, improved technology does not only make us convenient, but also makes us uneasy. The reason why we need to have developed vaccine is that as much as the vaccine gets stronger, the virus also gets more severe. Moreover, about the foods, we need to decide whether eat GMO or not. As an example, GMO technology does not only help us to solve the food problem, but also gives us the uncertain problem.

To sum up, to survive from this situation, people need to have competition everyday and every time. We cannot be comfortable due to we live in modern society. As a conclusion, I disagree with the question as I think now is hard to live and our grandparents had easier life.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...furthermore, we are making the history, also. As much as the time flows, people get...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... need to only memorize without choice. Secondly, improved technology does not o...
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Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...uation, people need to have competition everyday and every time. We cannot be comfortabl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, i think, in addition, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 252.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84126984127 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65804302895 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563492063492 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9037344838 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.7647058824 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8235294118 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112290962367 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364627713029 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352466544477 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0714488469111 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134302444832 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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