While some people may say complain about our technology and advanced modern life, I would rather appreciate our easier and confortable life today. As my grandparents used to tell me that the old days have better quality and happiness life, I like to say that currently life situation make us more movable and acccesible. There aremainly two reasons for my opinion.
Our life is known as advanced because of our creativity and technology skill. For example, I clearly can tell that the invention of air plane, rapid train, and subway are contributed to our modern life. In my home country, we used to take slowly and intermittened transportation to go to work so people did not have time to spend with their family. However, we have well developed public transportation system now thus we are able to have enough sleep every night and less stress from the long busy commute. The creation of transportation is not only cut off our time but also led us to take care of our health.
Speaking about accesible, I am not able to imagine the life without smart phones because we rely on using smart devices to manage our life more effectively. For instance, my mother plans her business schedule on phone and share it with colleagues. Moreover, she searches what kind of dinner she would like to make every night and to get full of recipe for the specific food so she sometimes tries to cook some authentic french food at home! I personally use my phone to wake up in the morning and also to track my work out activities even to listen to music while I do sports. We are not able to go back to old days which is without smart phones or laptop. We got used to live with these and we all feel comfortable. There is potential problems such as SNS problems between young children. Hence, we need to educate how to deal with unlimited information and what is true or wrong with is.
All of considered, I agree with the statement that our modern life is easier and more confortable than back in the days.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 665, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to living'.
Suggestion: used to living
... without smart phones or laptop. We got used to live with these and we all feel comfortable....
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Line 5, column 718, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are potential problems'?
Suggestion: There are potential problems
...with these and we all feel comfortable. There is potential problems such as SNS problems between young chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, speaking about, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59217877095 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58297586167 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555865921788 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7471041823 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.75 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123960391447 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449815299296 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474496696037 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106289220705 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638711567042 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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