There are certain considerations or factors that everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the impact of advertisements on young children. I certainly agree that television advertising directed toward children should be forbidden. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, it can bring children's attention away from other positive activities. All parents perfectly understand that the ages of two to five are very crucial for children to grasp and extend their ability. In fact, the experiences and skills that children would learn in these years can aid and abet to be prosperous in their future life and career like a chain or domino. For instance, this age offers the best opportunity for children to learn a second language or shape their personality. So any time and energy wasting by television advertising can delay or jeopardize children’s success.
Furthermore, avoiding from physical and psychological difficulties is another noticeable reason. Most of the advertisers now use an excellent visual and audio effect to offer persuasive programs, and so attract children to purchase their products. Based on a research, which has been carried out by Society Department of Utah University in 2016, more that 60% of the advertisements directed toward children are oriented for candy and others junk foods. These foods can be the origin of several thorny problems such as overweight, malnutrition, and hypertension. Therefore, it is crystal clear that impeding mentioned advertisements would be necessary to hinder those sophisticated and problematic issues.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that these advertisements have some benefits and they should be allowed. Chiefly, almost all the advertisements are very exciting and amusements, and hence they can provide a happy time for children. Besides, they can keep children busy for a moment and thus parents can free time for house hold tasks. However, still I affirm that advertisements aimed for children should not be permitted. Although advertisements have some profits, these advantages can be neglected. Plus, there are dozens of instructive or informative cartoons and animations that can present a joyful time for children.
Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that television advertising is not beneficial for children. Participation of learning and healthiness are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Based on a research, which has been carried out by Society Department of Utah University in 2016, more that 60 of the advertisements directed toward children are oriented for candy and others junk foods.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and junk
are very exciting and amusements
are very exciting and amusing
flaws:
1. reason one and reason three are somehow duplicated. about time.
2. Time is actually not what the topic wants us to say since the time for ads is short and is not important for children.
how to find reasons? as we told, We can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all speaking/essays topics for disadvantages.
first, we can fetch two reasons from above reasons:
reason one: it will waste parents' money. (because children will push them to busy something)
reason two: children accept all information as a complete truth without any questions. (get bad information)
there is one reason easy to fetch from the topic:
reason three: bad for children's health
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 2068 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.399 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.106 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.773 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56396866841 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21940902686 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592689295039 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1847076006 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8636363636 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4090909091 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200232793387 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669926685844 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645702322937 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12578405711 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278317258711 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.67 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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