Nowadays, the development of technology yields people a life more convenient, turning many things that seem impossible in the past become realities. Nevertheless, there are still many disputable concerns whether technologies bring to human beings, especially children, bad effects. Most specifically, some parents are worried that technology is the key factors that deteriorate their children’s creativity. As far as I’m concerned, I totally disagree with this statement for the following reasons.
First of all, technology is the tool of which children can take advantage to create new things. Children are always curious about everything around them, so when they come across high technique stuff, they are obsessed with its mysterious function and eager to know how it works. For example, Bill Gates had a chance to approach computer when he was young. He was attracted by the original computer and he did everything to discover its secrets. Definitely, the computers are the tools that help him fulfill his obstacle accomplishments in the software industry. There is no doubt in my mind that these advanced stuffs will pave a path for many great inventions.
Second, technology helps widen children’s knowledge. In the past, children were able to learn things from one perspective. Today, with the spread of internet, children can get more information from their friends in different countries. Therefore, they can have many options and solve the problems in different ways. Knowledge is the base of creation. This diverse knowledge will inspire children and encourage them to invent new things. When you surf the internet about a specific subject, it usually discussed by many authors, so you will be able to collect more information which increases your depth level of understanding, and widens your imagination that leads you to become more creative.
Finally, getting acquainted with the latest technology makes children has the interest in science subjects in school. Every high technology has root in basic science. If children are curious about these things, they will have more motivation in their study. After graduation, when some children can master a certain field, they can extend it to invent a new product to meet human being’s demands. For example, my nephew is interested in modern toys related to space technology such as airplanes, rockets, and satellites. I think the toys can inspire my nephew to pursue universal science in future college or at least teach him about this nature.
As all things considered, technology has made children more creative than they were in the past because it widens their knowledge, providing more information to create new things and nourish their enthusiasm in studying. They are fundamental tools as well as internal inspiration that help children fulfill their dreams
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2323 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.185 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.692 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.92 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.954 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.52 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.465 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...statement for the following reasons. First of all, technology is the tool of ...
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...ve a path for many great inventions. Second, technology helps widen children&...
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...t leads you to become more creative. Finally, getting acquainted with the lat...
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...t least teach him about this nature. As all things considered, technology has...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'at least', 'for example', 'i think', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'as well as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253875968992 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.151162790698 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108527131783 0.0866891130778 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0348837209302 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0736434108527 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102713178295 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0251937984496 0.0351676179071 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88054928335 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0271317829457 0.0309702414327 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0678294573643 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0193798449612 0.0209618222197 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0193798449612 0.0139019557991 139% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2870.0 2387.08602151 120% => OK
No of words: 447.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.42058165548 5.86048508987 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.402684563758 0.338922669872 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.324384787472 0.251872472559 129% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.250559284116 0.174417080927 144% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.158836689038 0.112833075102 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88054928335 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563758389262 0.524397521467 108% => OK
Word variations: 67.9843555356 59.2087087015 115% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.88 20.5533526081 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4993494907 48.84282405 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8 120.699889404 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.88 20.5533526081 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.68 0.644075263715 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 50.3184787472 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.47014925373 1.45489161554 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341628540151 0.300154397459 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0811193520134 0.103427244359 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0763910166837 0.0752933317313 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.430861607988 0.497263757937 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.116843231156 0.151897553556 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106799915614 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580814587 0.0781384742642 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304905460206 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0251983147642 0.067059652881 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214429929209 0.210909579961 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303541069127 0.0618886996521 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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