The children from the current generation are very fast and more creative because of the advancing technology. The modern schools are started using the computers and the projectors to teach students; such a transformation from the traditional blackboard classes to modern teaching support students to think critically. Some people believe that the automation impact on the children’s negatively. And others prospective computerization open the student’s brain to think widely. As per as my concern, I don’t believe technology inhibit the children talent because it helps to improve their knowledge and make students more innovative.
First and foremost, using technology toddlers can learn more. Now we all are choosing techno-schools for our children’s because it is our trust in technology. In addition to that, most of the schools now started to give small projects like homework for kids encourage them to use technology to solve the problem. What more, they are unknowingly starting technology to improve their knowledge and wisdom. Here I am using my personal experience as proof. Recently, my computer was crashed and I was trying to use different sources to store my date. My uncle son, six years young child suggest me to use I cloud. I was really surprised because at that age I even don’t know how to open the computer. This example clearly illustrates the importance of technology.
In addition to enhancing their intelligence, technology support children’s to think innovatively because it provides the variety of resources. Now the people started to play video games and watching programs on the television. Although a few times it is not good for them, overall it helps them to think differently. When children playing the video game, they compete with the well-proven game to win and that creates the logical thinking. Furthermore, when we are toddlers, we are having the limited sources to learn the subject. Since the technology is growing up; plenty of resources for kids in the online sources help to improve their skills. For example, when I was a kid I study using paperback textbooks, they are not updated as a result I don’t know have the updated knowledge and we all think in the same way because of lack of resources.
In sum, advanced technology always keep children’s updated and innovative
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, really, so, well, for example, in addition, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26790450928 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10730223872 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527851458886 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6283186828 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2727272727 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1363636364 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36363636364 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116747344256 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370672713433 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0259803778249 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768184116219 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00875129813496 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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