In the present generation, people are more curious to do new things in their lives for success But the situation is quite different once they become a successful person. In fact, it is not ideal for everyone, some people believe, accomplished citizens love to learn new tasks regardless of the risk but others believe the opposite. Personally, I don't think so the success people try new tasks in their life. I feel like this that for two reasons and I will explain in the following essay.
First, they don't have enough time to concentrate on new things because they already had a busy time schedule in their routine work. When a successful person has a free time, they like to invest their expensive time to improve their current work rather focus on the fresh work. For example, if we consider Google CEO as an example, although it is a well-known company, the directors of the companies keep on trying to enhance the quality of the Google website rather spending time on other task
Second, it is not that easy to learn new task quickly in a short time even though they have a passion to learn because as the as grow the memory would decline. Learning the fresh task for children is much easier than the old people. When I was in high school, I was the person do math quickly without any device but now the situation is quite different, even for a small calculation I take much time. For example, my grandfather was a retired professor and scientist. He love to read innovative scientific article but he could not implement those task because his body was not very supportive to think deeply. This example explores the difficulties of learning new task after the certain age.
In conclusion, learning new events is not that easy even though they are fascinated to learn. Because it needs time but that available once a person is success. On the other hand it is difficult after certain age. By considering both I don’t think people are readily available to try new risks once they achieve their goals in life.
- TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you 70
- TPO-22 - Integrated Writing Task Ethanol fuel, made from plants such as corn and sugar cane, has been advocated by some people as an alternative to gasoline in the United States. However, many critics argue that ethanol is not a good replacement for gasol 81
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6797752809 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50739972927 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511235955056 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3442041022 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.125 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200314670752 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067284398806 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454671195777 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127297531275 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506594312777 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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