The manufacturing companies are applying various strategies in the market to sales their product. The media, paper and mouth publicity are the some of the better ways to promote their products. Although it is not ideal, Principally advertisement in the television is one of the common methods to show their brand to the audience. Some people believe that allowing children should not allow watching adds directed to them. And others not. As per as my concern, I don't allow the children to see adds because it addicts and make them violent.
First and foremost even though the current generation of young childrens like to watch TV, it is not necessary for toddlers to watch television ads. the advertisements use colorful images and the celebrities to publish their ads. so, obviously, they are more attractive. especially when we are in the young age, we don't know much about the ads, however, we like to watch because of other reasons like the favorite celebrity or the colors in the programs that we like most. As a result, addict to that program and some might not concentrate on the studies. What more, the grades are low. here I am compiling my own experience when I was studying third grade, I started to watch a cartoon channel, particularly The Tom and Jerry. Initially, I love that program because it is fun, unlikely, they stared superman adds in between the program and I was too much attracted to that add rather than the program. as a result, even though I have an exam, I use to watch that program. as a result, I failed in two subjects.
Second, in addition to the addict, television ads impact on the children's behavior. currently, we are seen a lot of advertisements about the various models of the guns. the young children are more attracted to the guns because of the repetitive adds, it influences their mind to use it. as a result, kids argue with their parents to buy a gun. Furthermore, they are trying to operate. what more the parents are facing a lot of trouble to control. For example, when I was a young kid, one of my friend stolen his dads gun and bring to the school, Luckily, my teacher found it and called and return their parents.
In conclusion, it is not a good idea to allow young children to watch unwanted advertisements. it impacts on their studies and also behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, second, so, third, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6855036855 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70342183866 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501228501229 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9878963138 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.28 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.28 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0928774837413 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0251133478439 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0275899289455 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594834887253 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00830504708034 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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