TPO 10. A/D? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
With the frantic pace of technology advancement, especially in computer-related fields, it is bound (likely) to find either a personal computer or laptop -even both- for each person in each home. The world without this high tech instrument is unbelievable, even for children who feel strong enthusiasm for computer games. Considering the across-the-board attractiveness of computer in the recent decades, the relevant question stemming from this fact is, whether computer games are valuable for children or they are simply time killer. As far as I am concerned, the latter opinion is much wiser for the below reasons.
To commence, everybody has a limited amount of time in his life during which should make an effort to discover his talents then takes advantage of his unparalleled capacities. As it is proved this plan will come to fruition. In other words, there should be a priority in one's life which assist him achieve promising future life. As a case in this issue, in the biography of a successful businessman, who was the youngest among all businessmen in his country, was written that instead of playing computer games which was and, unfortunately, is an extremely common useless hobby among children, he decided to study and work hard simultaneously. It was mentioned that for his leisure time he does exercise.
Secondly, computer games are restricted to animation of violent attacks of troops to innocent people. In perfunctory view, they seem do not have any negative repercussion on youngsters, but by scrutinizing the statistical reports we can come safely to the conclusion that with establishment and development of these kinds of virtual plays children, boys in particular, act violently among their peers just like the main characters in those plays. We cannot turn blind eyes on the positive point of computer games. Forasmuch as these games are prevailing among the young generation, and adolescents would like to be accepted among their friends, so that they tend to follow the mainstream of playing computer games in society. By getting involved in this hobby they will be accepted by their clique and it gives them a strong sense of confidence to make progress in actual community. However, the dark sides of this issue profoundly overshadow light side of that.
To conclude, I reiterate that playing computer games not only prevents children from their priorities, but also makes them conduct wildly in the society. So that, I do believe that our young generation by no means should be permitted to play with.
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...vantage of his unparalleled capacities. As it is proved this plan will come to fru...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'in particular', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225321888412 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.152360515021 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0836909871245 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0536480686695 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0600858369099 0.0685040099705 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.150214592275 0.118717715034 127% => OK
Participles: 0.0407725321888 0.0351676179071 116% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84788715915 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0278969957082 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0901287553648 0.0887237588012 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0171673819742 0.0209618222197 82% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0107296137339 0.0139019557991 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2549.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 417.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11270983213 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359712230216 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285371702638 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.223021582734 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134292565947 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84788715915 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587529976019 0.524397521467 112% => OK
Word variations: 71.4137369083 59.2087087015 121% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5294117647 20.5533526081 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.1880348064 48.84282405 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.941176471 120.699889404 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.5533526081 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.647058823529 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 53.0665820285 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.56451612903 1.45489161554 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295932565389 0.300154397459 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.090645658457 0.103427244359 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0687836241619 0.0752933317313 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.522967808645 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142619473964 0.151897553556 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11489303801 0.114077575197 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525306582518 0.0781384742642 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297105322228 0.336927656856 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0419304840098 0.067059652881 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205870767701 0.210909579961 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319145899958 0.0618886996521 52% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 86 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 26 Out of 30