Without no doubt some people would agree that playing computer games is not productive and children should not be allowed to play them, while others may consider the opposite point of view. As far as I am concern, I disagree with the statement presented above. Computer games gained bad reputation because its violence and addictive effect in some players, but with an adult control and supervising computer games can be also a fantastic tool to improve children skills in early age that would help them during their future school time.
First of all, computer games cover a wide range of possibilities and types, for all different ages. Consequently, we can find those games that are appropriated for each children. However, is responsibility of the parents or adults in charge of the child to choose and supervise the games he or she is going to play with. Thus, a good computer game could represent an excellent option of entertainment at the moment children has free time. For example, it was very useful for my daughter to play computer games related with English vocabulary. She very soon started to improve her English.
Additionally, computer games can be a fantastic tool for improving different skill in children. According to the University of Toronto, children exposed to computer games in early age are more advanced in temporal spacial skills, identification of shapes and colour, language and communication, than those that only played old traditional games. For instants, the computer game Minecraft is a computer game with the goal to construct and design three dimensional objects in a plane or area. Children build, after getting some tools and killing some monsters, houses, buildings, town and cities. This game require the application of creativity, spacial temporal skills and recognise shapes and textures. Consequently, children playing this game improve all those skills.
Finally, computer games start with a personal experience but soon it expand into a multi interactive experience, where not only, several children are playing simultaneously on line, but also create group of friend with same topic in common: the game. To illustrate this, let's bring up again the Minecraft game. It became very popular among children between eight to ten years old, and in consequence, the game was part of the daily conversation between those player. To the point that other kids started to play to belong to a group or friends. Considering this, I understand that computers game should be played by children.
In summary, taking care of the reasons exposed above, controlling and choosing the right computer games for children, the proof of how computer games can improve different skills and the positive social effect when share same games between a group of children, I indeed disagree with the statement presented in the thesis above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'requires'.
Suggestion: requires
..., buildings, town and cities. This game require the application of creativity, spacial ...
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Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'expands'?
Suggestion: expands
... with a personal experience but soon it expand into a multi interactive experience, wh...
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Line 7, column 454, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this player' or 'those players'?
Suggestion: this player; those players
... part of the daily conversation between those player. To the point that other kids started t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, in summary, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20562770563 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76163079291 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532467532468 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.1682791739 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.523809524 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302086400829 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104915869894 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699226413634 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198157319414 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479289905088 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.