We are living in a technological society. It seems to me that all family has at least one computer at home. Therefore, it is easy for children to approach the computer. Meanwhile, the computer contains a numerous games, and children always are curious to play games. This phenomenon causes a tremendous problem. In my opinion, parents should forbid children to not playing computer games. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children need time to study. It is no doubt that the most important task of children is to study and enrich their knowledge. We are living in a modern society. Education plays a pivotal role in our lives. If children are not educated carefully, they cannot meet the requirement of life. They will have to face many difficulties to deal with their lives in the future. Therefore, they need to focus on their studies. Moreover, children are easy to be addicted to computer games. Once they are crazy about the games, they cannot study well. Therefore, their studies will suffer. My friend is a compelling example of this case. When she was ten years old, her father bought her a computer in order to support her studies. However, she loved to play games. She could not get out of the computer. Her studies suffered seriously. Hence, her father had to punish her and did not allow her to play computer games any more.
Secondly, playing computer games harms children's vision. Researchers have shown that if children spend too much time in front of the screen of the computers, they will hurt their eyes. Their lachrymal gland will be dried. Therefore the ability of seeing things will be decreased.
Last but not least, playing computer games will make children gain a lot of weights. Obviously, children are in the age of physical development. If they spend too much time sitting to play games instead of doing exercise, they will be obese. It will cause many diseases.
In conclusion, people have their own ideas about the issue of whether parents should not allow their children to play games. In my view, for three reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I totally support the idea that playing computer games is a waste of time. Parents should never accept for their children to play computer games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'game'?
Suggestion: game
...while, the computer contains a numerous games, and children always are curious to pla...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s. Their lachrymal gland will be dried. Therefore the ability of seeing things will be de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, at least, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81772151899 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46398704833 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493670886076 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7597132682 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.9705882353 100.406767564 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.6176470588 20.6045352989 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251327589311 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648783529138 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622123715108 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161989391335 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336767782614 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 11.7677419355 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.49 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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