Kids and children need to play with computer. Not today but long time ago computer games were like miracles to children's lives. They helped children when Elvis Preseley was playing in romantic movies. Some people even think that we also need them as adult. However I strongly disagree with their opinion I believe that it weill disturb human's life effectively.
First of all, we would live in better world today, I think that the time children and teenagers devote to their computer and computer games if they consume their time more efficiently the world will change a lot. My own experience was a good sample for every teenager, when I turn Fourteen computer games were playing an important role in every teenager's life. I became addicted to video games and I failed my mathematics as a result of not studying.
Moreover, they are very expensive, especially the new one. Everyday there is something new in the Market and if the child become accustomed to new technology his parents will be bankrupt. My uncle's experience is that they became bankrupt because of the cost of internet as well as the new games.
Furthermore, when parents can not buy some thing for their children they feel terrible and that is why their first priority will be to make child happy. If instead of playing these games we teach them math and chemistry we would be much happier. We do not have to change the world. New world is like this and especially if you are raising your kid in the world you should cope with new changes.
In summary, From what I stated above, it is extremely obvious that I disagree with computer games but what can I do in today's world.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: I became addicted to video games and I failed my mathematics as a result of not studying.
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to of and not
Sentence: However I strongly disagree with their opinion I believe that it weill disturb human's life effectively.
Error: weill Suggestion: will
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1327 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.576 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.351 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 81 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.968 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... think that we also need them as adult. However I strongly disagree with their opinion ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
...were playing an important role in every teenagers life. I became addicted to video games ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...very expensive, especially the new one. Everyday there is something new in the Market an...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
... Furthermore, when parents can not buy some thing for their children they feel terrible a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'i think', 'in summary', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222929936306 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.162420382166 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0764331210191 0.0866891130778 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0700636942675 0.046263068375 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.111464968153 0.0685040099705 163% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111464968153 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0191082802548 0.0351676179071 54% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.40452407527 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0222929936306 0.0309702414327 72% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0636942675159 0.0887237588012 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0254777070064 0.0209618222197 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0191082802548 0.0139019557991 137% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1649.0 2387.08602151 69% => OK
No of words: 290.0 408.028673835 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68620689655 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48200974243 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.306896551724 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21724137931 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165517241379 0.174417080927 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0793103448276 0.112833075102 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40452407527 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541379310345 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 55.1751010312 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 18.125 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.677839865 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0625 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.644075263715 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 39.849137931 45.7405998639 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.02777777778 1.45489161554 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308094577 0.300154397459 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0864203320411 0.103427244359 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0624754984635 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.511829948778 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170192111377 0.151897553556 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114456816742 0.114077575197 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623084311212 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.233341120762 0.336927656856 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0632806531576 0.067059652881 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181613735703 0.210909579961 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531104287631 0.0618886996521 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.