By and large, family is one of the most predominant aspect of every person’s social life which leads to sense of identity, community and love. People care about their family and take care of them. There is a moot point in this case as to whether the extended family is less important now than it was in the past. I personally concur with this statement. In what follows, I will attempt to investigate some conspicuous reasons to justify my thesis.
First reason that deserves some words here is that today people have more secluded lifestyle. It goes without saying that modernization of life had been changed the plethora number aspects of lives. Much more job hours, long distance communication and much more personal enjoyment and entertainment lead to more solitary and secluded way of life. Hence, people are reluctant to communicate with their family; besides provided that they desire to devote some time to their families, they will prioritize their nuclear family over their extended family. An example will shed light on this notion. Consider a 35 year old man who lives in a big city alone. Owing the high cost of living condition, he have to work double shift in order to afford his costs; hence, he finds less free time to spend with his family, and should he find some, he will prefer his parents rather than extended family.
Second, people gain independency sooner than before and it dwindles their family attachments. It goes without saying that nowadays the majority of juveniles leave their parents for job opportunities or education, hence they reach high level of independency from their family in young age, conversely, people in past either rarely did people leave for education or most of times they continued they family career, therefore they stayed with their family and kept in touch with them. Needless to say maintaining relationship is the key element of attachment and caring. Hence, seldom do people see their family not to mention extended family; consequently, they care less about them. For instance, consider a 30 year old girl who lives in a big independently and she have visited her aunts 2 timed since she left her home for collage. As a result she feels less attached to her aunts over the time and is reluctant to visit them regularly.
To wrap it up, I assert the statement that nowadays extended family is less important that past. Owing the modern secluded life style people find less time to spend with their family and provided that they do, they will prioritize their nuclear family over their extended one and independency in young age trigger less family attachments.
- TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to 73
- TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...hem. There is a moot point in this case as to whether the extended family is less important n...
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Line 3, column 698, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...g the high cost of living condition, he have to work double shift in order to afford...
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Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the times') or simply say ''most times''.
Suggestion: most of the times; most times
...arely did people leave for education or most of times they continued they family career, ther...
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Line 5, column 766, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ho lives in a big independently and she have visited her aunts 2 timed since she lef...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, conversely, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94808126411 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55852918145 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51467268623 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.4029944167 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.6 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17028907205 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06245016016 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693139599424 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134337876622 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556968303485 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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