Family plays a pivotal role in our society. It is home for us to be born and grow up. However, we are living in a modern world. The standard of living and demanding to adapt to this life, the extended family is less important than it was in the past. I completely support this statement for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, people tend to live independently in their own department to fit with their lives. Obviously, in the past big family often lived together in a house due to the fact that they usually worked together in a farm or their business in the same places. Moreover, their lives depended on each other. Therefore, they had to live in an extended family to support and take care each other. However, today people travel around the world. They live wherever they can find a suitable job and make them happy. My family's experience is a compelling example of this case. Some years ago we lived with our grandparents, uncles and aunts. Since my parents found good jobs in a big city, they moved to live there. Thus, my uncles and aunts followed my parents to move to big city to find job. Therefore, now our big family do not live together as before.
Alongside the elaborated reason above, another idea that is noteworthy to consider is that couple or small family may feel more comfortable to live in their own house. Today life is more complex than ever before. People have many things to consider and worry. Thus, it is better to live independently. Further, people will have more freedom when they live independently than living with many people. They can do whatever they want. They can schedule themselves without any hesitation of bothering others. For example if you are a student and you live with your parents or other older people in your family, you have to take care of them and if you go out for something you have to tell them. But if you live alone you do not need to tell them anything.
In conclusion, people have different ideas whether the extended family is less important now than it was in the past. For two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I totally support this statement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5824742268 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42503723923 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497422680412 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6299503684 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.8518518519 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3703703704 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.74074074074 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222869816473 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603911078402 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628886713996 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158482004499 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368567384829 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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