TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

As the well- educated parents start to take the lead of modern society, how to better educate our children and correct their behaviors has become a essential question. There are two opposite viewpoints on this question. Some people assume that parents should allow their children to make mistakes and make them realize their mistakes and correct them on their own. However, in my point of view, this assumption, which I totally disagree,is a little simple. I will explain it in the following paragraphs.

First of all, in most situations, our children are not as mature as their parents thought they are. I f they make a mistake , the most possible outcome is that they do not realize their mistakes at all, let alone expect them to correct them. Some people may repute me and claim that parents could tell the mistakes to them, so why they do not just tell them this is wrong and do not do that. We are supposed to spare som time for our children to grow up until they are intelligent enough to realize what outcomes will come up and what harm will it do to others. Before that, I consider that it is better to teach our children the right behavior before they have the ability to introspect themselves.

In addition, sometimes it is too late to correct children’s behaviors. Suppose children have no idea what their behaviors will lead to, they will not reduce their level of destruction. For instance, I heard that there is a child who is very naughty. He likes to pour water on their furniture, however, their parents assumed that it was no big deal and considered he would amend his behavior after he grown up. Finally, the outcome is that the boy pour water on the piano in a exhibition when they are visiting a gorgeous museum. The consequence would be so serious that correcting it may be not enough. This story reminds us that you can wait your child to correct their behaviour, while others and the society probably are not patient enough to play this game with your child. When it comes to some nonsignificant problems, parents are able to allow children to make mistakes, however, if this problem is about some hard rules which cannot be broken, then children ought to be educated and ruled as soon as possible.

Admittedly, giving children the autonomy to behaviour and to show their thoughts are more likely to cultivate a more free and confident characteristic, since they are not ruled and forced to do things they do not like. Afterwards, these children will be more braver to take part in some activities which no one has ever involved in. However, on one can tell what it can result in and how long it will take to finish the process.

In conclusion, as to me, it is better to correct their behaviors before children making some irreversible mistakes, because we can show some examples to them instead of letting them be the example.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... and correct their behaviors has become a essential question. There are two oppos...
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , is
...his assumption, which I totally disagree,is a little simple. I will explain it in t...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hought they are. I f they make a mistake , the most possible outcome is that they ...
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Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...that the boy pour water on the piano in a exhibition when they are visiting a gor...
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Line 7, column 255, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'braver' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: braver
...ike. Afterwards, these children will be more braver to take part in some activities which n...
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Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...instead of letting them be the example.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69642857143 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54335141264 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7108937162 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.590909091 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119356533276 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366061150107 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295760923202 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728048080909 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019628643278 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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