Nowadays, money is no longer the limit for people to buy their favorite thing, since the commercial prosper of the whole society offers us a more affordable ambiance. As a result, other factors become to be critical by choosing a product, such as the ways certain products were propagandized. All the businessmen and dealers make unremitting efforts to make their goods more attractive in order to compete with their rivals. In this regard, I have to admit that most advertisements are showing better products rather than what they really have.
In the first place, those advertising always take the best perspective of their products and conceal the drawbacks. For example, a car company advertises its small cars by punctuating how environmental friendly they are due to less oil consumption instead of referring the narrow space inside the cars. Interestingly, when they sale a much larger car which costs more fuels, they would rather emphasize the spacious and comfortable room. I am always blown away by overwhelming advantages of advertising and all these products seem to be impeccable.
What's more, the advertisements leave people the best impression by using the most perfect models or celebrities to exaggerate the advantages. As we all know, slim women looks pretty no matter what they dress. However, we usually ascribe their beauty to the clothes when we see a clothes’ commercial. Consequently, when we see how chick or elegant Taylor Swift looks as she dresses a specific skirt, we might have the illusion that we will look fabulous as well if we dress the same. Chances are it even doesn’t suit our bodies. The merchants are so aware of this mass philosophy that they always invite some people with perfect figures to represent their products, to make their mediocre goods shine.
The last but not the least, advertisements are adept at using theatrical facial expressions of the representatives and unreal proportion to mislead ordinary citizens. After watching how enjoyable the models eat an enormous box of chili cheese fries, man stands in front of the KFC can't help going in, even he had bad experiences. Such advertisements create a situation to trigger the innermost urge of a passerby, and persuade him to have a try. In fact, after a little box of chips being offered his could recognize that he was tricked.
Taken all aspects above into consideration, most advertisements talk big about their products. Granted, making profits is beyond reproach, nonetheless such an overestimation of its products will cause a giant disappointment of buyers. After all, consumers have an impartial judgment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...hese products seem to be impeccable. Whats more, the advertisements leave people t...
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Line 7, column 283, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... pommes, man stands in front of the KFC cant help going in, even he had bad experien...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to go' or 'go'.
Suggestion: to go; go
...an stands in front of the KFC cant help going in, even he had bad experiences. Such a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, really, so, well, after all, for example, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17633410673 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.988840379 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626450116009 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9882824423 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.238095238 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5238095238 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136651340314 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391831883446 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362670377261 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0740928408639 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439974082036 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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