Looking around at the world we are living in, it is not difficult to find out that we are surrounded by countless numbers of commercials now. As a tactic used to persuade the customers to buy more products, advertisements are an exaggeration of the real quality of the products, and I do believe that they make commodities look much better.
First and foremost, many effects of the products in the commercials are actually fabricated, and it can be hard to be verified or falsified. This is best illustrated with the example of personal care products. Typically, these products are promoted to contain certain kinds of ingredients that can have exclusive benefit for the skin. Nonetheless, the actual function of these substances can hardly be tested, unlikely that of the speed of a computer. As a result, a customer is likely to spend a considerable amount of money, but fails to find the special effects that are promoted in the advertisements.
Secondly, we should always bear in mind that each product has its own advantages and weaknesses, but the manufacturers only show the shining points to people in commercials. For instance, it is not uncommon for a cell phone maker to boast the speed and graphical performance of the product, making it really tempting for customers. Once they buy the product, people may find that the battery of the product is really short-lived, or the device heats a lot. All these weak points discovered during the course of using disappear the customers.
Last, an additional point comes to mind is that advertisements are a form of art, and just like any other art works, some elements in the advertisements are intentionally made to look good. It is the nature of art. The sellers are not to blame for doing so. In fact, there are many outstanding commercials that are praised and remembered because their artistic value, instead of the products they are promoting. But this unarguably makes the product seemingly better in the commercials.
Due to aforementioned ground, I agree with the idea that advertisements definitely make the products looker better than they really are.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...a lot. All these weak points discovered during the course of using disappear the customers. Last,...
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Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'products'' or 'product's'?
Suggestion: products'; product's
...that advertisements definitely make the products looker better than they really are.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, may, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01412429379 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0143996189 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550847457627 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2502846147 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.411764706 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192020918014 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059087667633 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702460349866 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121559244396 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761121137869 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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